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O' Mi Amor

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O' mi amor, my true soul mate

wrap me in your embrace

and reveal to me our true fate

Tears fall as you cup my face

we will survive this journeys quest

     we will survive

     we will survive

O' mi amor, lifes bitter test

 

O' mi amor, my true soul mate

many trials we will bare

There is no room for jealous, hate,

for loves a gift to share

I need some strength to overcome

the pain and torture brought my some

     I need some strength

     I need some strength

to battle all thats come undone

 

O' mi amor, my true soul mate

I need you close to me

On my knees in a weakened state

I can no longer see

My wounded heart does need a touch

your the one with a gift for such

     My wounded heart

     My wounded heart

is wrapped in a lovers clutch

 

 

 

Author notes

Trijan Refrain
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines.
Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line
at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different.
The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8.
The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4,4 refrain/8



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  • Lonesome Dove
    November 18
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    Thank you for explaining the Trijan refrain. I am in awe of your knowledge and talent. Thank you for sharing such beautiful poetry. My favorite is the last stanza...O' mi amor, my true soul mate
    I need you close to me
    On my knees in a weakened state
    I can no longer see
    My wounded heart does need a touch
    your the one with a gift for such
    My wounded heart
    My wounded heart
    is wrapped in a lovers clutch


  • sgking123 gold member
    November 8

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    wow

    this was indeed excessively and endearingly sensuous....i loved its short meander from start to end. and a definitive impact .you do know the use of words and quill is sharp.well done .liked it


  • Sector-Hunter silver member
    October 25

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    That seems like a cool form I have never seen it before. I love what you did with it. This was strong and breath taking I loved each line. I see that you did good in the contest thats great. Thank you for reading one of my poems that means a lot SH


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    September 9

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    again another so truly lovely and beautiful in every way shape and form I don't know waht to say with each write of urs I read I lose words!!! This is beautiful and breath taking!! I love u very dearly you are wonderful and so loving!!! I love u sis!!!


  • Vintage Chiffon
    August 4

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    THIS IS JUST AMAZING!

    What kind of form is this? I know very well rhyme, anything in particular?
    You have done a splendid job with this, the flow was PERFECT
    I couldn't pick out a flaw......mi amore


    I love you mummy haha


  • HereComesTheSun
    August 1

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    a very well written poem, each word seems to be have been chosen for each to show the emotion and display it beautifully
    thanks for entering


  • No Quarter
    July 29

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    beautiful poem. I loved these lines:
    we will survive this journeys quest

    we will survive

    we will survive

    O' mi amor, lifes bitter test


  • Rick Weston silver member
    July 21
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    Nicely done. A real pleasure to read.


  • crivanea silver member
    July 16

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    What a beautiful form! I love these fine lines poet! Words that echo with passion and verses that mutter sweet caress ... A wonderful joy to read. Very nice!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 10

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    A very beautiful trijan refrain.

    The meter and flow are bang on, love it


    Love
    Jeff


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    July 10
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    A beautiful form, beautifully done.


  • glenn shannon silver member
    July 10
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    stunning piece indeed you certainly put heart and soul in this one thanks for sharing .


  • DolceVito gold member
    July 9

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    Superb write, Promesa de Pasion, mi amor...You're doing pretty good with form poetry...Bien hecho


  • Griswold
    July 8

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    This is beautifully done sweetheart, what a wonderful and touching Trijan refrain. I am not sure I have done one of these yet. But I just might have to now, you make it look easy. Love you baby... Scott


  • cookie-monster
    July 8
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    This is so beautiful. The picture, too ^-^ I always know my guiardian angel is watching me

  • LadyBlue8
    July 8
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    Touching sad poem


  • iced-rose
    July 8
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    this makes me think of points in my life, that I dont think I could have penned as beautifully..


  • EternallyAlone
    July 8

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    the picture just spun it all together, I love it! It was a very cute love poem, and fit very good with the picture. ^_^


  • just mercedes gold member
    July 8

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    You've used the repetitions to great effect in this form - lovely work, smooth flow and gentle words


  • Xelgaroth
    July 8

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    This is lovely. I like the use of the Spanish; it seems to rather enhance the effect, inasmuch as it, like French, is often a "language of love". There are a few spots here and there where the grammar and meter could use some touching up, but it does not ruin the poem by any means. I am fascinated by this form. A... Trijan Refrain? Interesting. I may ought to try one of these myself. Thanks for writing this! I enjoyed it thoroughly! Keep it up!

    Dan


  • saulgarcia
    July 8
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    Touching...I feel the emotions you express...love so real...


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    July 8

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    oh this is simply breathtakingTory,,
    wonderful penning!!

    Que Bella

    Rend


  • kam359
    July 8
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    oh my gosh i think this is the fav poem i have read on this site good job beautifully written.


  • Bosiarbooger gold member
    July 8

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    Beautiful

    This was incredible such longing and a need to heal. Waiting for that special person to come along. Something we all hope for most of our lives. Again you have deeply touched my heart as only you can do. Again you have brought me the hope I have craved daily for decades. My life made richer by you, a modern day hero and savior. My every thought is of you. Thank you for who you are, All my love and devotion. Forever yours, Rick


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 8

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    Breath-taking Poetry!

    -


    Love Lifted Me


    A tender touch of grace you need,
    than this is what you shall receive.
    I plant my soul to sow the seed,
    and in our hearts we must believe.

    I care for you, and feel your pain,
    daily I'm weak, but love you so.
    If nothing left in life to gain,
    I'd live to carry your sorrow.

    Tenderness let our soul's abide,
    where rivers flow of love divine.
    Compassion narrow our pain wide,
    so we can taste from healing vine.

    Such a beautifully inscribed piece Victorious,
    wow, you know how to say something.

    Thanks for sharing with me, and know you are loved!
    Big 's and hearts colored with lover's art.

    -Timothy aka SOS.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 8
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    Youi have the strength, you have always had the strength.

    A beautifully written Trijan refrain.

    Love
    Jeff

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