So bloody sick of failing yet
So scared of all it’s entailing I bet
Inevitably I am going to crash again
Waiting for this course to end
Shove back with full force and begin
Again and again and again and again
It is so brutal I feel I will bail
That again I will try not to fail
I can’t help it I can’t escape
From a brush off with a closest scrape
That it is spiraling down into a draw
I cannot deal with overwhelmed onslaught
Through drama of tragedy crashes
Comic relief through mist smashes
Punk loser demons stuck in their minds
Bashers and bruisers of all kinds
I've come to terms with false voices
trampling and back-spacing choices
I will not give up this fight
Smash my fears with delight
Pull from the embers dying light
A new forged mind burning bright
Despite the jumbled mess I am in
Again and again and again and again
After all, it is only a stack of essays
Piled up high in scattered frays
I’m still too half-crazy to be trying
Yet, pressures fall to confidence of self-will relying
Just made long island lemonade and never handed in my badge
Family motto "Have Patience & Endure" is a good enough adage.
original 23mar04
revised 11may08
Author notes
decided long ago i'll tell those lemons where they can stick it
must quote my inspirations:
my mentor and piano teacher for so many years for the title that was often said as reminder of encouragement
and a true-blue buddy shawna who never threw in her badge neither
but sometimes sick of all the pressures
but i'll carry on stay strong dive in headlong
Written March 23rd, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- When Life Gives You Lemons....(Round 1) by Jfd.
300 points, ended May 14, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
got insecurities? bash them back in their holes
Comments
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This is excellent, Phil!!!!! I love the determination in this piece. It's so YOU! Your strength of character makes me so proud each time I think of you. God be with you, my wonderful AP son. Stay strong, and never forget you are loved. Mum
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I will not give up this fight
Smash my fears with delight
Pull from the embers dying light
A new forged mind burning bright
Despite the jumbled mess I am in
Again and again and again and again
These two stood out the most to me and boy can I apreciate and totally understand! wonderful write full of great compasion and most of all emotion, pure raw emotion!
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hmm where do I start? I like the snap shots of ideas you've presented here....however, the rhyme, for me, was distracting and fell short....I wish the entire piece was more cohesive, because I REALLY like your word play and unique ideas....I'm putting you through to the next round, because I see alot of potential in this.....thanks for taking the time to enter
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sweet
thank you for the feedback, never received any. how could i pull it together and make it more apparent that i wanted to show the self-defeatist being overthrown by new hope? glad you likes my wording & ideas. humbly thanks for the chance of topic being right to drag this poem up. the next shall be a new write
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