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Tight-Lipped

Curls of silk and a painted-on mouth, you talk about as much as an old corncob doll.
Your lips may twitch as you struggle for a word, but never does the silence break from your tongue,
And never may the laments of love come from your sweet, burdened lips.

I mustn't be ashamed of you and your silence, but wouldn't it be more prudent for you to speak your mind?
I can never tell if the tongue-tied words that glow from your eyes are true...

...or even what they mean.

The full moon illuminates the perfect features of a muted soul.

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  • xXxLokiixXx
    July 11

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    i love it, even though i hate cliche things... but its still really good. its not too cliche only a little.


  • lovebeat
    July 8
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    I like this... it's cliche, but that's okay once in a while.


  • tuesdae
    July 8
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    i likes this a looooot. u sound so..... intelligent.


  • dieu.
    July 8
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    title: tight-lipped.