You want to be with me? Let’s do it soon.
We find each other something that is rare.
So would you like for us to be pair,
if only for a night that makes hearts swoon?
A simple meeting neither had expected
brought us together for a strange encounter.
I knew you thought that “I would like to mount her,”
and mutuality found us connected.
Please let me know when we can be together;
you only need to tell me where and when.
Do not leave me alone with “might have been,”
bound to a fantasy with broken tether.
It’s your move; show me how it is to go,
if only for one night, my lovely beau.
Author notes
Bowlesian sonnet. Feminine endings in Lines 5-9, 12. Intentional variations to meter in Lines 11 - 13.
2009 July 08
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Once again reading your work proves to be a joy
Very nice poem
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Thank you very much.
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Beautiful sweet one, uncertainty is always hard.. Have faith precious, I will pray for a wonderful ending
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Thank you, sweetling.
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Lovely
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Thank you!
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This is beautiful and a sonnet that is penned so well. Many poets forget that lines ending with feminine rhymes should have eleven syllables. You nailed this and it flows perfectly.
Love,
Amera♥
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Thank you very much, Amera. I am learning a thing or two in the Gentle Introduction to the Sonnet Class (thanks to Epistomolus and Ceridwens Soul)! Thanks for the read, the critical commentary, and the praise/applause.
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Good job
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Thank you very much!
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a most excellent write
no critical review but a gentle sigh
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Thank you, dear sister Poetess.
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