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A murderous thief
Running rampant
Through our streets
And in our homes
Threat to our daughters
Their story book endings
Hanging by a cut thread
Scissors in the air
Slicing through the dreams
We had of a life so perfect

I took your time, now let me have your thoughts....

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  • doyouloveit
    July 8
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    you just have to add more to it i think on your revisen


    • mcw120588
      July 8
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      i felt a second or third verse was necessary just couldnt come up with what yet.


  • doyouloveit
    July 8

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    so intense my dear what have you been studing or discussing on life's dark side that some like to live out loud and threaten us in any matter very well written nicely done