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Closure

Missing image

Natal memory stored deep within

 

of maternal bed of long ago.

 

 

Fetal yearnings on quest

 

continually, to find

 

beginnings to his existence,

 

till a mother who kissed him

 

goodbye long ago at birth

 

embraces him once again.

 

This time love has found

 

the way back, forever!

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Immediately seeing this print was a picture of my son, looking inside himself and around for his roots of his existence...My husband and I told him of his beginnings when he was two years old...and he has been looking and wondering ...This year has brought closure to a little boy's questions, and joy to his birth mother's heart!
Prompt:http://strany.deviantart.com/art/Reborn-128626407

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  • John BoSox
    August 20

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    Wow....are yousitting down??..so weird this is..I believe we we were meant to hook What do you think?I am anxious to speak with you...My son is 25 years old..Michael..We adopted him when he was 2 days old..He is our miracle.He grew not in the stomach of my wife, but in her heart..He has always always known he was adopted, yet he never has been curious who his birth mother was,We have given him all the info we have of her....so if he wanted,,he could begin to investigate, and , if he did, we would gladly do all we can to help him....So far, he has not had an inclination to do so.I wish that he would..I have no fear of this..He knows this.I actually would love for him to hook up with his birth mother.If it were me, I would want to..I would be curious..I would want to know about genetics, and so forth.So far, he has no desire..I would like to know how your son finally hooked up with his birth mother..What was the process?.I hope you feel as I do, and have a desire to hook up with me.Your talent is amazing, mine is not, yet our styles are similar..I love free verse, as you

    God bless

    John


  • Sharon Marie gold member
    August 7

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    Beautiful

    This is definentley speaking Of god coming into the world as a babe then leaving the world truly our risen Christ This is wisdom from God Beautiful I couldn't have said it better. You captured His birth death and resserection. Awesome write!

    Blessings sis!
    Sharon


  • penman gold member
    July 23
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    Excellent

    Such a great write for the prompt. And so well expressed. Congratulations on the honorable mention


  • crivanea silver member
    July 16

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    Just beautiful... Lovely words that are personal and well said.. Congrat on the HM ... I do think you did the picture justice., a great write for the prompt..


  • Titus gold member
    July 10

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    I used fetal once, and I've not seen it since until now, lovely embryonic stage of life it seems, as the after life or before, either way it is magnificent.


  • maktub
    July 10
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    wow...amazing...thank you...you have reach somewhere very deep and touched my heart...


  • Hikari Lady
    July 9
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    "This time love has found
    the way back, forever!"

    You always capture the depth of things and look beyond any eye-sight. How true and touching is the way you took the prompt. God bless your son and guide him through life.
    Your writes are so exceptional.

    Love
    ~Noor


  • Rose Angel gold member
    July 9
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    How true your words Angelo...For all those seeking souls, that may have given up on finding answers....Never give up...


  • awannabepoet
    July 9
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    Rose,

    Your words are just amazing, this poem strikes a chord, it lends a home to those roaming hearts that search and never find.

    What we give in this life, the gifts of love, of happiness they carry no earthly price, no amount of gold could even begin to sway the balance.

    I so love this poem of yours and feel would like to truly thank you for sharing this.


  • Desire gold member
    July 9
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    Bless Your Heart~

    Ooooooooooooh this is a Beauty and You are Blessed also Your son to have You in his Life~ This swells the eyes
    Very personal write that tugs at the Heartstrings
    Congratulations on Your HM!
    -throws confetti- Woot

    Powerful piece Beautiful~
    Thank You for sharing Your Love
    Best wishes in all You do
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Ninth-Poet
    July 8

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    There is something chilling when eyes glance that picture in your piece. While your words reforce the value of the image.

    Keep the ink flowing!
    -Ninth Poet


  • Sci
    July 8
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    There's something very heart-warming about this piece and yet slightly sad.

    Really liked it!


  • Kathraina gold member
    July 8

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    Very unique and creative take on the prompt!
    I would not have thought of this concept for the picture at all, which draws me to it. Marvelous write!
    Bravo


    ♥ Kate


  • Denerica silver member
    July 8
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    Wow...brilliant. I am glad he nurished his roots...Blessings.


  • maralisa silver member
    July 8
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    a wonderful write sis good luck inthe contest maralisa


  • penman gold member
    July 8
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    Excellent

    Such a terrific write for the prompt. So very well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.

  • goalsv
    July 8
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    A beautiful way to put the picture in words. I love how you refer back to the fetal look.


  • Antipodi
    July 8
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    wow a very profound and wonderfully written classic write dear poet


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    July 8

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    This to me moved me, I guessed the story as it poetically unfolded before my eyes..
    A loving Mother like you to share the love with a Birth Mother, he is one very lucky and special Man.
    Beautifully crafted sis
    Best wishes Julie x


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    July 7
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    when i first heard, you were such a blessings in such an uncertain time, i loved this write, it is filled with so much meaning, your heart is big
    I love you
    Rend

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