Pretty Painful Purple People
Kristen Kay
Rotting rusty retitled roots,
Starting safely sound sowing.
Dying dark decaying deaths,
Fertilizes four free forests.
Great green grasses grow,
Pretty painful purple people.
Rosy red roses rise,
Tall teal tulips too.
Beautiful blue buzzing bees,
Flying far fairly fast ,
Hastily hungering hot honey ,
Into icky indigo insects.
Luscious lustful lips longing,
Mighty moldy mouthy mice.
A contest entry
- PIF q u i c k i e by Kathraina.
575 points, ended July 8, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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WOW!!! Brilliant, I have a feeling you're one of those people who easily amaze everyone repeatedly. Love the alliteration, it IS very hard to do and especially 'cause it keeps going through the WHOLE poem
Brilliant.
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Ha, Thanks
I wish I was one of those people.Thank you, this was my first attempt at alliteration.And, looking back at the last alliterating poem I wrote it will probably be the last .Heheheh -
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Why the last? I really enjoyed it, and i'm sure others did too but you are the writer. Anyways I think it was bloomin' beautiful brilliant <
....And you are one of those people ('least to me, if that matters.)
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I love your use of alliteration
And the rhythm is well done
What i might sugest is that on this line:
Rosy red roses rises,
Tall teal tulips too.
How about changing "Rises" To "Rise" it would make it sound a little less awkward.
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Keep On Shining
x~Chloe~X
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Great use of alliteration in this piece!
I love your creative take on the prompt.
Bravo
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Great! I like how you used the same beginning letter in each line, that can be quite tricky to make it make sense, but you did well!
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Odd, different but creative and weird.
I think this might make a good addition.
good job, keep writing.
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