Unforgiving thoughts race through my mind like a pack of raging beasts. The shadows that weigh in are as heavy as a wool blanket that I was wrapped around in. Imagining a perfect peace. A peace so calm it takes me up further than the birds in the sky. As peace struggles to take over; I hear a rap tap tap sound. As I wonder who or what; It rushes through as a mighty wind. It's death anxiously awaiting to engulf my life my soul in to its' eternal flames.
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beautiful piece, keep up the outstanding work. this was really discriptive i liked it. Thank you for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck spread the awerness.
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hmm.Very deep thoughts.In fact this is an abstract painting.Lets wait for the sunshine to take away the nights of nightmares.
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This is very hard to read. And it seemed to me like you were more telling a story then actually creating a poem with this one; and while poems do tell stories, it is far different then simply trying to write a novel. But this was very good; though the font should probably be lighter as so it can be read better. Thank-you very much for entering this piece into my contest.
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ivy hope
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Your welcome. I hope I didn't seem too harsh or anything. I wasn't trying to be.
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