Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

o cardiologist

you were right:
there is a key
to open my ribcage

all feedback appreciated

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    August 21

    Edit | Reply
    i know...

    it's the key to your heart,
    though the key to your pacemaker
    works just as well.

    (hooray for insurance! )

    bravo.


  • glazecovered
    July 21
    Edit | Reply
    Is it called a chainsaw?

  • piggyback
    July 8

    Edit | Reply
    wow... good title, though the "o" leaves me a bit thinking. Maybe that's a good thing. I told you I loved this poem - it's so simple and yet intense. I took it as someone seeing through you perhaps more than you wish to see through yourself. This is awesome use of brevity and metaphor and I'm so glad you wrote (and posted!) it.


  • Odds and Ends
    July 7
    Edit | Reply
    i really like this one, hun.

    sweet, to the point and hard-hitting.