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Lifeless

(chorus)
Lifeless, lifeless.
I feel so lifeless, lifeless.
Why do I feel so lifeless, lifeless?
Hate, hate.
I'm consumed by hate, hate.
I feel so forgotten, forgotten.

(Verse 1)
Stars light my road.
Carrying my empty soul.
No one cares; no one will.
My life so lonely and ready to kill.
Pieces of the past consume my brain.
Lifeless bodies hang from chains.

(chorus)
Lifeless, lifeless.
I feel so lifeless, lifeless.
Why do I feel so lifeless, lifeless?
Fate, fate.
I'm consumed by fate, fate.
I feel so forgotten, forgotten.

(Verse 2)
Dungeon doors locked up tight.
Dungeon doors closed tonight.
Casting me with eternal darkness.
Leaving my soul so lifeless.
Pain and agony writhe with me.
Black and silver is all I can see.

(chorus)
Lifeless, lifeless.
I feel so lifeless, lifeless.
Why do I feel so lifeless, lifeless?
Kill, kill.
All I want to do is kill, is kill.
I feel so forgotten, forgotten.

(Verse 3)
Desolation upon this world.
Leaving my soul a lonely girl.
Darkness and pain reign upon me.
Black and silver is all I'll ever see.
Pain, pain, pain and agony.
Days, days, days never to see.

(chorus)
Lifeless, lifeless.
I feel so lifeless, lifeless.
Why do I feel so lifeless, lifeless?
Will, will.
Do what you will, will.
I feel so forgotten, forgotten.

(chorus)
Lifeless, lifeless.
I feel so lifeless, lifeless.
Why do I feel so lifeless, lifeless?
I do, I do.
What will I do, I do?
I feel so forgotten, forgotten.

(outro)
My soulless body is rotting, rotting.
These black tears are spotting, spotting.
My mind isn't plotting, plotting.
My lifeless body forgotten, forgotten, forgotten...

Author notes

The musical type is probably a rock and screamo mix. I like those two types of music. Don't hate on me because I like it!

Also, every word behind a comma is echoing.

In verse 3, days and pain fade in.

Dax

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  • Walls-within
    July 24

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    Yes this can be a song. More than likely a more upbeat, i wouldn't see this as a ballad or anything. I like the darkness which would of course be more rock/screamo. In respect to the sceamo, the echoes could be screams and it would really hit the listener. I think you have it all right in your head, I would enjoy seeing it performed. Great write hun. =)


  • Antebellum
    July 10

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    I'm going through the lyrics group commenting, and I keep running upon yours. What type of music do you have in mind writing these? Just curious becuase I dont exaclty know how the beat should be readd.