I didn't think of you today, not even once.
For me this was an unexpected bunce.
It was a blessing, this is true
that I didn't think of you
I've tried so very hard to forget
The very first day that we met
I looked into your beautiful eyes
Now I know they were a disguise
Your habits and your nasty crew
Are the reasons I had to get away from you
So now I try hard not to think
Of when you put me on the brink
And I've decided that today
I'm glad that you have gone away
But now I have just realized
My thoughts have been unrealized
Because I have thought of you today,
But now I'll think in a different way.
A contest entry
- I didn't think about you today. not even once. by jinsays.
1098 points, ended July 7, 2009, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
Comments
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wow! maggie this is really good! i like it alot, it has a good meaning and the story came across really well. great job!!
p.s. just a suggestion, but i would REALLY like 2 c u do a quinquian (four line stanzas) and/or a freeverse (no rhyme and meter can b alittle funked up). try it out, and if u want u can read some of my poems, mist are quinquians or freeverse! but u execute this style really well so dont give up on it!
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And I've decided that today
I'm glad that you have gone away
But now I have just realized
My thoughts have been unrealized
Because I have thought of you today,
But now I'll think in a different way.
thank you for taking the time to enter this contest. I wish you the best.
Love,
jin -
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just curious...who won?
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It was okay, the rhyming was forced tho.
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