fuck these words
we agree on the common meaning
and the principles behind linguistics
in the end these few sounds
strung together with tears and fate
mean an empty bottle of whiskey
by a full ashtray
I woke up and had eggs
slept till noon, feasted upon gin
stayed up listening to the sounds of pain
coming from a scratchy radio
fuck these songs full of feeling
lies upon lies for sale
your face doesn’t haunt my dreams
the passion has fled my flavor
you’ve poured too many drinks for me
I’ve lit too many of your cigarettes
with my fire
no pointless words of love –
just an ever-consuming need
for your presence and words;
maybe your lips and smell;
fuck these unfortunate circumstances
fuck your flawless reputation
you have all my words
brilliance and intensity
passion and thirst
not to keep them hidden away
right alongside with yours
you were the best of times
you were the worst of times
fuck allusions
fuck personal pronouns
fuck everything
I won’t be your stranger
show me passion
Author notes
Unrequited love....blah blah blah...reading Camus....blah blah blah....unable to feel...blah blah blah...
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fuck pronouns in general
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Brillant
I wish I could have borrowed these words about a month ago.
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gorgeous writing...blah blah blah
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ewww stop reading camus!
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this is great, awesome job with it
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wow
this is one awsome write, i love a write that hits!!
havent had one for a while so well done you!!
soo much power in each line and as i read, each line was as powerful as the last, great imagery i congured up love it!
the passion has fled my flavour, oh im loving that line.
a great write, thankyou and most definatly worth the paper its written on!!!
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Wow~
Holy Moly this is one Powerful verse and what images that come~ I have not been over here in ages and do miss Your reads~ You always teach me something new
This is no exception~
Love how You let this one out~ even with more F words than I could count- You still make it Beautiful
Thank You for sharing Your Voice
Best wishes in all You do
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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It's rather long. I think a few parts could be easily cut out or shortened to hold the reader's attention more effectively. Also, some capitalization/puncutation would make it much more powerful.
I liked the poem, it just needs a little polishing.
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