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Just like you

Yes, I've satin gowns and glass slippers
At the end of the story
But try to remember the state I started in
Grieving my parents and only dreaming of glory

Wiping the cellars and washing the dishes
Getting the mail and dusting the floor
Taking out the garbage and mending their clothes
Again and again, and there's even more

I know in real life that there are no fairy godmothers
So what if I hadn't found my prince in the end
What if all those happily ever afters
Were all just a dream, a wish, just pretend

Dressed in rags, hand-me-downs
Isn't allowed to take a bath or shower
Never go anywhere exciting like the ball
Feel like Rapunzel locked in a tower

Maybe one day in the story I'd escape
Maybe my step-family would let me go free
I'd make my own living and find a house
I'd start all over and make a new me

A regular life in a regular body
If I was ever a princess you wouldn't have a clue
I'm no one special just an average person
Sitting here wishing for miracles just like you

A contest entry

Please comment. This was for a contest and took an extremely long time. Be considerate, but constructive. After all, this contest had no rules, so I want this the best it can be.

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Comments


  • Jonathan ROBIN
    July 26

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    Cendrillon

    Once again one is agreeably surprised by the maturity evidenced in this poem and regretting the scarcity of comments - perhaps few realizing that the author has only seen eleven summers.

    That having been said 'all are born equal but some are more equal than others" and the "only an average person" is becoming less and less tenable as an acceptable assertion as one peruses your poetry ... congratulations would be more than well deserved given the context


    • Tinselpool
      July 27

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      Has it ever occured to you that you might be commenting (wasting your time) and applauding (wasting your points) on an unpopular, few-commented author that nobody seems to notice?
      Let me explain.

      You are.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    July 22

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    I really like the rhyme in this piece I think that you have done it very well and that the ending is a great twist well done on a wonderful poem - thank you for entering!


    Polly