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 A lamp in heaven

  casts sharp shapes in the garden –

    round face, an old friend.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Palas Kumar Ray
    July 28
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    Simply vivid.


  • Harrisham Minhas
    July 12

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    This is vivid.
    You have written about the moon here, but it can be interpreted as someone's real old friend's face.
    Well-crafted.




  • Daizee silver member
    July 9
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    Round face... I love that that's all you used to describe it.


  • IronMaiden1236
    July 8
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    Dang it!!

    You make this look toooo eaaasssyy!!!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    July 7
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    The moon, full tonight, has cast off the clouds, to be as brilliant as this inspired haiku.


  • Glirastes II
    July 7
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    'Selene's radiance and beauty shines from her light'

    Berffeithrwydd

    Jem


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      July 8
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      A Welsh word I know only because of its Latin root - and you doo me too much honour with it, Jem.


  • Peteskid gold member
    July 7
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    very nice, the round face is popular in poetry here but rarely as nice as this...'skid


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      July 8
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      I know - what can one say about the moon that hasn't already been said!


  • Dreamer With Dreams silver member
    July 7

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    I love haikus! Well done, thanks for entering, and good luck in my contest!

    Safely hidden in the darkness,

    ~ The Rocker Who Lost All


  • Mirthryl
    July 7
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    Very nice haiku


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 7

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    Great stuff, not that my moon belongs in a haiku

    Not bad at all

    Jeff


  • Amera gold member
    July 7
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    Love it but….
    5/7/5? When did you start conforming?

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • albymyheart gold member
    July 7
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    Just beautiful...Alby


  • Cannonsfire
    July 7

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    Wow, i think that's just about the sweetest image i have ever got from a haiku. Words fail me here. Just know I loved it C

  • Bad Bill
    July 7
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    Nice...very nice! When it comes to haiku you're definitely no slouch.

    Good one,
    Bill


  • Matt E. Smith
    July 7
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    i tried to do a haiku...once..lol i think i should take notes from you

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      July 7
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      You could do a lot worse than taking notes from me, Matt, though I say so myself.

      Nah, seriously, thanks for the compliment.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    July 7
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    Just another lovely job
    well penned love


    Good luck

    Love
    Tory

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