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i need to stop falling in and out of love with your charm, your ignorance.
your will to captivate me with heartbreaking lyrics or an amorous embrace.
i can't keep caving into your chest muscles when my arms feel like jello
from the lies you injected into the very tips of my fingers. it's not fair
how simply you portray love, condensed in cedar frames with hand-carved
designs in the crevices. and yes, i know you have an agnostic streak
struggling to escape from your pores, but i'm running out of reasons to
give you another chance.
and even if my temper excels your apologies and for some reason i
decide to swallow my tongue and give you the opportunity to break me
all over again, you and me are merely a disguise for infatuation. i will
never fully grasp dignity until you choose to let loose that thinning
string you've held me by for so long.
i've accepted your apology, but now that i take a step back to
fully observe our constant positive and negative reactions, i love
how we used to be; how you used to caress my face when i fell asleep
in your lap, or how we'd stare at the stars when we'd all collapse on
the ground around the bonfire with your arm around my trembling
shoulder blades. i loved everything about you then; your eyes, and
how they were similar to mine, but not as darkened. your smile
always brightened up my day, when i was strutting around hallways
to determine fate.
but now, i realized i keep turning back time to get a glimpse
of who we are, only to understand that i really don't have the
slightest idea who we've become. and i'm scared to death to
find out.
maybe we're not destined to get beyond these crossroads
or swerve into the right direction to where i would like us
to be. our hearts are tied together by twine, and it becomes
more diffused by each day that effortlessly reigns from your
calendar. we are only two people in the universe trying to
figure out exactly how we feel and how to twist each others
thoughts to make them our own. and we will never succumb
to the amount of emotion it takes to surrender to serenity.
--
in case you haven't figured it out yet, i tend to be blunt
and view 'forever' and 'never' as an excuse to keep our
hearts from questioning one's motives. but the truth of
the matter is i need to stop falling in and out of love with you,
because i don't know who 'you' are anymore.
Author notes
i n n o c e n c e j a d e d . x x
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Comments
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Easier said than done, forgetting someone with beautiful words and a captivating smile is like telling the stars not to shine, or the fish not to swim. Beautifully expressed.
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I like it
But I think I've been readin too much girl poetry, haha -
this is beautifully written, im in awe
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"i can't keep caving into your chest muscles when my arms feel like jello from the lies you injected into the very tips of my fingers."
You write so intricately. I keep falling in love with your descriptions.
"i was strutting around hallways
to determine fate."
Magnificent.
"we are only two people in the universe trying to figure out exactly how we feel and how to twist each others thoughts to make them our own. and we will never succumb
to the amount of emotion it takes to surrender to serenity."
It is for lines like this that I fall in love with your poetry, this is absolutely stunning.
"but the truth of the matter is i need to stop falling in and out of love with you,
because i don't know who 'you' are anymore."
Don't worry honey, you'll figure it out soon enough. And he's probably a different "him" everyday, so it's natural that you fall in and out of love like that.
Shelly
xxx
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i need to stop falling in and out of love with your charm, your ignorance,
your will to captivate me with heartbreaking lyrics or an amorous embrace
-i really like this and the tone it creates, but i think it maybe drags a little. possible consider 'i need to stop falling in and out of love with your charm, your ignorance, your will to captivate me.' or just cut it into two seperate sentences.
when my arms feel like jello
from the lies you injected into the very tips of my fingers
-that is a brilliant use of imagery and talent. i love the uniqueness here. you always think of these incredible lines which i could never wish to write.
but i'm running out of reasons to
give you another chance.
-really powerful way to finish that stanza.
or how we'd stare at the stars when we'd all collapse on
the ground around the bonfire with your arm around my trembling
shoulder blades.
-again, really strong imagery. can almmost smell the charred smoke. that whole stanza really spoke of love to me. very dedicated and sweet.
stanza four is everything poetry should be. the emotions are fucking dominant and i swear it's the best thing i've read all night.
last line is an absolute killer
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This is just perfect.
we are only two people in the universe trying to
figure out exactly how we feel and how to twist each others
thoughts to make them our own.
- Amazing.
♥
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yes, i know you have an agnostic streak
struggling to escape from your pores,
gorgeaous!
but now, i realized i keep turning back time to get a glimpse
of who we are, only to understand that i really don't have the
slightest idea who we've become. and i'm scared to death to
find out.
story of my life omg, so so so much
writingfree -
Ohh, hoe, this is sosoSO sad yet so incredibly lovely at the same time...this is the best poem you have ever written about him. Honestly. I reallyreally think so.
"and yes, i know you have an agnostic streak
struggling to escape from your pores, but i'm running out of reasons to
give you another chance."You have given him more second chances then he deserves. It is time to let go...you are better than this.
"how you used to caress my face when i fell asleep
in your lap, or how we'd stare at the stars when we'd all collapse on
the ground around the bonfire with your arm around my trembling
shoulder blades. i loved everything about you then;"Wow. Such powerful and heart-breaking images that stain the mind. Geezus. You always manage to say everything I'm not able to in your poetry. Thank you
"maybe we're not destined to get beyond these crossroads
or swerve into the right direction to where i would like us
to be."I just loved the wording/idea of 'crosswords' and 'swerving' in the right directions. An excellent parallel between the journey of life and how people can affect you. Gahhh. And the ending? Holy shit; it was PERFECT.
iloveyou.
thisisfreakinggorgeous♥
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