a pregnant moment, a split-
second seed
cradled green in palm of God.
who else would whisper
my soft-bellied growth
to fall from earth to sky:
"you will become Excelsis"
?
Author notes
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Gloria_in_Excelsis_Deo
matrix: something that constitutes the place or point from which something else originates, takes form, or develops.
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critique please.
Comments
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This poem is really nice . I think that the only critique i can think of is htat the last line seems really forced. You may just want to modify some of the lines so that they flow together more neatly.
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Thanks so much for your suggestions! Very much appreciated!
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a maz ing
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