Why can't I just tell him,
How I really feel?
And how come i can't tell him,
that he makes my life surreal?
What he doesn't know,
is what i cannot say.
When i bring myself to tell him,
that will be the day.
Maybe i am wrong,
to keep it to myself.
Just maybe its untrue
to leave my love on a shelf.
I wish that I could tell him,
so our friendship could be more,
so he could hold me close and say,
I will always be yours.
We talk, we fight, we joke, and play,
But I really want him every day,
I want to be more than friends,
don't want all this to fade away.
I wish I had the confidence,
geuss what? I really don't,
wish I could tell him how I feel
geuss what? I probably wont.
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Aboslutely wonderful I am adding you as one of my favorites cant wait to read more!
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Aww if this is true it sucks just tell him how you feel. Keeping it inside doesn't help. I have told two guys I liked them although one said he doesn't like me I was glad I told him. Things were awkward before but now we are really good friends who talk about everything!! It's a wonderful piece though with good rhyme
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Wow this was awesome loved the flow and I'm a big fan of rhyme can't write in any other style
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Great Job
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Wow. This is wonderful. I have felt like this quite a bit too(with the guy/girl thing obviously switched). Lol. I'm sorry for this but sometimes I get all perfectionist-like. Fortunately it's not very often because if I was I don't think even I'd like me. "Guess" not "geuss" Sorry. Otherwise, I totally love this poem. Awesome job!!!
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Awesome
Omg...this is great.
I can relate to this so freakn much...but my dude is an ex and he has a gf and we're all cool. But dey have know idea what im feeling inside.
Well one day, if not already, you'll get the courage to tel him or you'll get over him and find someone even better!
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