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Flames and Snow

Flames and Snow
Inspired by "Fire and Ice" by Robert Frost
Kristen Kay

 
If it's God's desire,
To end this world by fire.
The flames,
Will match those from Hell. It will end all war games.
The new world can begin. 
 Cleansing the Earth of all sin
And, when the ground has turned into a crisp
The new life has begun at a wisp.
As people tend to their grief.
They will pray for some relief.
After the purge.
A new life shall emerge.
The people sill suffer.
But, they will come out tougher.
The will cling to one another.
Like a son to his mother.
When purity is the only thing to show.
God will give his children snow.
Those who stay strong in his belief,
May enjoy this cool relief.
Those who falter
And, do not pray to the alter.
Will only freeze.
No-one will hear their pleas.
 The pure of heart.
Will make their new start.
 
If the Lord planes for ice.
It will kill the grain and rice.
 The snow,
Will freeze the low.
And the demons too.
Though the true.
Will be saved
But, only if they have behaved.
  The hate filled past.
Will be buried fast.
 The cold,
 Will make some consider, if their soul should be sold,
Just for some heat,
  To not become frozen meat.  
As the white
shows who are light. 
Flames will be a gift to the forgiven..
Though not for the unforgiven. 
Their bodies will burn
So,they can learn.
 People will marvel at what this gift makes,
Massive lakes.
Some children will even play.
As sin is washed away.
 

And let all know.
The righteous will be comforted by flames and snow.
 As the evil dies in one of the two Hells.
No-one will hear the yells.
For there is a new birth.     
The child is Earth.
 
 

Author notes

I don't know why but I hate these two lines "To not become frozen meat." and "When purity is the only thing to show."

Mine is different-ish I borrowed the world coming to the end theme,but I put my own spin on it. I wanted to try to end this with a better slightly 'happier' ending.Oh and just ,because mine is longer don't think it's better.I know it's not.By the way, I would be one of the people who died.

Robert Frost's original poem

Fire and Ice
By Robert Frost 1923 ( I think)

Some say the world will end in fire,
Some say in ice.
From what I've tasted of desire
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great
And would suffice.

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  • DolceVito gold member
    July 6

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    Awesome, I like the spin, though I'm not a fan of rhyme...Nicely done

    • Thank you

      Thank you, sir I'm glad you liked it. yeah, I seem unable to make a poem without trying to ryhme.And eventually I force the rhyme. I kinda suck at free verse.

      • DolceVito gold member
        July 6
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        Try prose/narrative. It allows you to say exactly what you want to say and still sound poetic--I'm thinking "Mending Wall" by Robert Frost, "Snake" by D. H. Lawerence. I used to think poems had to rhyme to be poetry; now I rhyme only when I write songs or humorous pieces.