A shallow grave, no one to save,
worms feasting on your eyes.
The stench and smell, a taste of hell,
believing all the lies.
Your perfect nose will decompose
with all your mortal skin.
The bugs will eat your tasty meat
and leave a lip-less grin.
Your body swells as inside gels,
the blood has turned coal black.
No rebel yells or conquer tales,
you are a vulture snack.
No truth was heard. Ignored the Word.
You'll never live on High.
Your life laid low, no after glow,
you're just dead when you die.
In a list
A contest entry
- It’s a CREEPY Dark Rounds Contest by Paloszoo by Paloszoo.
1200 points, ended July 11, 42 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Maleficent Masterpieces by Miss Macabre.
800 points, ended July 26, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Hit me with your best shot. Critique this poem.
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Besides the great rhyme the imagery really caught me. This was fun and tad creepy. I enjoyed
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Wowzer big guy..how'd I miss this one?! Kinda creeped me out lol but such powerful imagery!
Congrats on the double shiny's but to me they are the wrong color. I'm loving it! 
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This was my first good, dark write. I wrote Beware a ways back in the beginning. Thank you for all of your encouragement!
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Oh my goodness
You have penned the ultimate dark poem indeed . It reminds me of a l;itte poem as a kid I heard it was called whenever you see a hurst go by
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Love it. It's the kind of macabre I was looking for, a wicked poem really. Amazing. Thanks for entering and best of luck.
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Thank you.
I hope it suits.
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The starkest kind of death
Excellent imagery for the "creeply" feel of this poem. The physical demise is prominent, but something more everlasting dwells beneath these words. I believe the gateway to the deeper thought in this writing lies in the phrase "believeing all the lies", and then is brought home with "ignored the Word". This poem presents the starkest view of death when there is nothing to look forward to beyond death. Not a surprise that it won a trophy, congratulations.
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i love this write, very impressive, congratulations on winning a cup, so deserved!
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it is creepy
our views are a bit different
very well done my friend
great imagery!
God bless you always...
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Could be
True the body rots away abd the magots enjoy their feast. but tis a hard subject as many never wish to go there. But hell , nice going, for it is what happens. And the dust in the wind.
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OMG. I love this! BRAVO! Thanks for entering my contest and showing your work here. It's an honor to read it
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