silence is perfectly fine, our
heartbeats are all I need to hear to
allow me to feel at peace
where this road will take us is
now left to be discovered
as we entwine our fingers
and proceed forward
not sure of what lies ahead
depending on each other to make it through
each step strengthens our commitment
restricted by nothing
immense peace befalls us as the
completion of our hearts begins
flawless love is formed
our hearts merge
restoring faith
existing only for each other
through the hardest of times we will
emerge as a stronger union.
recognizing each other’s continual growth and
nourishing it patiently
inspiring each other until the end.
together we face everything and stand as one.
yielding to no obstacles placed in our way.
Author notes
an acrostic.... and thank you baby for helping me make the last lines of this come together. i love you so much.
Written March 23rd, 2004
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It's a beautiful poem, and the acrostic in it is very cute. I think the poem flows very well, although the lack of puncutation towards the beginning of the poem makes it a little harder to read. Overall very nice, though.
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This has real flow. I liked the hidden message down the side, although I suspect it was for your benefit more than for ours. All in all this was a great poem.
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a beautiful write with great flow and powerful language. Just a note...towards the end you added punctuation, where you didn't in the begining of the piece. Other than that, a great inspirational write.
Shelly
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wow that's really creative! good poem, i can tell it has a lot of meaning to you
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shawna and eric for eternity
very good, happy to read your peom.
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Wonderful acrostic. When I try to write these they sound so bad. Thank you for entering, and good luck to you.
Chelsea
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aw... how sweet... that is so kewl how it spells shawna and eric for eternity. that's so kewl. I'm sure that you two have something really special going for you. I wish the best for you two. keep it up, this is really good and has a lot of emotion. love, ~heaven~
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awww, this is so sweet! i like it a lot. its very powerful, in a sense, and it shows how much you care for each other. keep up the good work, and good luck in the contest
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This is a very well done acrostic, and my only suggestion is, I noticed at the end you used punctuation, but not through out the rest of the piece. I thought if you had used more through the piece it would give the poem a more sense of togetherness. Or to take out the last punctuations. I'm sorry, it just looks weird to me, and I just found myself adding commas and periods, so I could read it clearly. But that's just me, and I know that this is just lovely as it is.
Good luck in the contest.
Miseria -
Wonderful poem...you both are blessed to have each other
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A well done acrostic, lots of mushy stuff, and very sweet
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awsome poem. i love when people take a name or word and use it for the first letter of each line. kinda hard for me to do, but you did it very well.
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A beautiful and powerfull write, you have really expresses how strong this relationship is. I liked the way you show how much you mean to each other and how that nothing will stop them in their way to happiness. A wonderful acrostic and had a great flow too. Thanks for entering and good luck x
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Eternal love...
Such a sweet love song this is....for all eternity! You did a great job of writing this in an acrostic style - how much your Eric must love this! Love shines from the words so lovingly painted here! Good luck in the contest - and enjoy love!
~ Nicolette
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lovely
What a sweet portrait of love! You really communicate the peace of a relationship in which each is content with the other, and there is no need for striving. It was a pleasure to read.
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this is a great piece! it's so sweet. i like hearing about love, and the powerful bond between people, because it's such a happy warm feeling. this piece flows so well, and paints just a lovely picture. fantastic job, and thanks for entering <33
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I knew I would find your line in this one!
depending on each other to make it through
It fits so perfectly in the cento...it belongs
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lovely
goodness you certainly have gotten well deserved compliments on this, don't know that i can add anything, ummm... you knew this was a powerful piece of art when you wrote it and i feel lucky to have read it, i envy your happiness and your talent, and i thank you for commenting on my poem. -
that flowed almost too perfectly lol...way cool
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Wow.. it takes great talent to write these, especially one as good at this!!
I love the way you can make the words flow so effortlessly, yet still make it into an acrostic!
Brilliant!
xxx
Scarlet -
it took a long time to concoct this and you did well for you are after all writing about an eternity with Eric...and so it was worth the effort I am sure...lol..Artis
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thanks, i have this uncanny ability to make people smile
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hilarious
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I really like this! It reminds me of a poem I wrote recently describing love and the peace that comes over you when you are so in synch with someone. You describe this feeling so beautifully and eloquently,and it flows really well; a pleasure to read and enjoy the magic. May I play dumb though? I don't know what an acrostic is! Lily
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Very nice job. I'm happy for you two. This is a new style to me. Have not seen it before. You pulled it off expertly. It flowed very nice, and it didn't get all wonky just to maintain the style. Maybe I'll try it one of these days.
Peace. -
Very pretty and loving poem, I really like this. Lucky you to have such a love, I'd be jealous but I got a pretty great guy myself. lol
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awww.... that is so cute, I love it soo much, it's a great write. very clever, it would take me like three days to do something like that, well anyways I just wanted to say good jobe and keep writing.
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I would be proud of that too!!!That's so cool!you made that fit in there perfectly!great job!
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WOW THIS IS ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL!!! I am simply in awe...this is so sweet - it flows as divinely as wine.
You make this seem so simple, and I know it's not the easiest task, especially the longer it gets. What a beautiful way to show your love for one another I think you should enter this in a contest...I'll find it for you and send you the link.
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What a wonderful tribute to someone you obviously hold very close to your heart. You made me feel all tingley inside... ::sigh:: So that is what is it like to be in love...
Awesome poem!
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this is really sweet...i loved the flow to it, every line fits together perfectly with the other...nice job! Very creative indeed...keep em' comin'...
take care
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I love how this poem starts out soft and quiet, then builds to a very stong assertive ending. like a climax, if you will. LOL I love how you write of sticking together through hard times, nourishing each other's growth, and standing as one through all the obstacles. these are the characteristics of the kind of love that binds and blossoms and can't be derailed. stellar poem!
~ travis
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hey, i really like this poem awesome job! i really love the lines...as we entwine our fingers
and proceed forward
not sure of what lies ahead
depending on each other to make it through
it reminds me of me and my bf and i love him more than life itself and anything that reminds me of how much i love him is truly a good thing to me and that is what this poem did reminded me of our love and the question of how muhc i love him which is..more than life.. so over all great job~
forgotton -
My teeth hurt its so sweet!
Awwwwwwe! That was adorable. So sweet! I loved the title too. This is a perfect acrostic for a perfect couple. I'm happy that you have found someone to make you smile
Peace and love
Susan
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This is a great acrostic, I've never seen one this long before, I bet it wasn't as easy as you made it look
Really really nicely done here. I think you did an excellent job, and its a really sweet poem. I really liked the first couple of lines.
~blessings~
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Loved the accrostic in this poem!!!
Shawna and eric for eternity! Too awesome.
The love you two have is just wonderful.. something
I hope to find someday.
Like the flow of this write.. it's quite easy to follow
and I didn't get snagged up anywhere. Very nicely done.
Keep up the great writes!!
~Aimee
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SHAWNA AND ERIC FOREVER! WOOT! I GOT IT! great write and way to express your feelings! YAYO-
JPT -
Very inspiring and touching, and I really loved how the words touched the heart of mine and I wanted to cry while reading this, if not for the fact the mood seems to be happy. Happy lives for eternity, Shara and Eric!
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Lovely. I know how you feel and this was a wonderful way to express your feelings.
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Great write. The title is what attracted me also. Good flow, beautiful words.
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Wow, very nice. I enjoyed it. Nice title too, its what attracted me. Shawna and Eric for eternity eh?
-Hood
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smiles back
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*silently smiles*
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