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Farmer's note to his wife

Please forgive me for the field
That shall no crop this harvest yield
And for the roof left un-repaired
Don't think it's that I never cared
But I must go, to serve my king
I shall be back, perhaps in spring
Or in the summer, or the fall
I guess that's if I come at all
For war can be a deadly game.
But I shall try; you do the same.
Be safe, be strong
So we may meet again.

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  • catstar
    September 14

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    This is great. It captures the imagination of life hundreds of years ago with out the trouble of reading historical documents. That probably sounds weird but I love thinking about the past, I just can't stand the royalty focus of normal history. Like it! Thanks for sharing.


  • Badass Brea
    August 20

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    Thi is great! I can't write about kings, queens & of any century before my time, the words just never come out right, but your flow was perfect and it was a great little story wrapped in rhyming paper!

    I like the way you write! I can't wait to read more from you!
    Brea


    • Mellindrae
      August 20
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      Thank you. I got lost in a fantasy novel a long time ago...

      My body eventually found its way out, but my mind's still stuck there. Every so often it meets someone interesting and this happens. My fingers get extremely upset over all the forced typing, but my nervous system just tells them to "shut up".
      I'm glad you liked it Also, I love the phrase "Rhyming paper" that just sounds incredibly awesome.


  • voo-doo poetess
    July 21
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    Just leave it as is. Awsome write. So much feeling and truth. Thanks for sharing this with us.

  • TheBigRedOne
    July 11
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    Do not revise

    This poem is fine as is. The last 2 lines flow purposely awkward. Well done.

    • Mellindrae
      July 11
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      Oh..umm..thanks.

      Yeah, the last two lines would be staying as is...I'm just thinking of adding more to the rest, I dunno. More back story, I suppose.
      Anyway, thanks for the comment^_^


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    July 8

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    Beautifully unique and soft There is so much emotions and imagery in this alone it is so touching and wonderful

    I hope you enjoy AllPoetry and continue to share your words with us
    ♥
    Stay safe
    ~Manda
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  • Tylers Baby
    July 6

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    That was beautiful. i love the meaning behind it, and how it had a very nice flow. something about it though felt sad, i enjoyed the emotions of it and the images. very nice work Mellindrea.

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