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Asphyxiated Plastyq Bitch.

Selfish. Sick. Broken.

Ahem.
Excuse me,
pardon me.
Can you g-get out of the way?
I say again.
Can you g-get the fuck out of my way?

Asphyxiated Plastyq Bitch.
No strings attached baby doll,
when time turns over,
commitments dissolve.

Ash colored lover,
can you s-stay?

'Cause these hollow contusions,
look so out of place on your
perfect porcelain face.

So,
St-stand back
while timeless tragedy unfolds and,
t-ta-talk back,
'cause no one will try to listen if you
can't make yourself heard.

Underneath star light and
shadow,
t-t-time
is no trouble
for the loneliest of souls.

Ceasing under skies of grey.

Asphyxiated Plastyq Bitch.
No strings attatched baby doll,
when time turns over,
commitments dissolve.

Selfish. Sick. Broken.

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Psh.
I fail.
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Do it.

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Comments

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  • The Rainbows Mind
    July 14
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    I really like your style of poetry. It's unlike anything I've ever read before. It's very blunt, conversational, and confrontational.
    You make a very valid point with this poem and its something that should be explained to all the fake bitches out there. I could say so much about this piece, but I feel as thoough the piece speaks for itself.
    Great write.
    BC.


  • true juggalette
    July 6

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    Good write homie and I hope things get better. Mmfwcl love as always ninja. I also give u a w this comment . Enjoy the comment and the hug lol.


  • InterzoneTypewriter
    July 6
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    I like it, it's really clever. The stutter technique is clever, it really enhances the character that the poem describes. Just added a lot of depth in that simple way. As always, you've achieved a lot here. Your poetry shows an excellent mind. Thanks for sharing.


  • Mister Mattia
    July 6
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    You stole my favourite word! Except you spelt it the conformist way I liiiiiiiiiiike eeeeet.


  • Gypsy Via Orleans
    July 6

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    This is good. I don't know what you meant about you failing but, if you meant the poem, you're wrong. You gt an A plus for this.


  • CharmingViolence
    July 6
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    Not fail.

    Doesn't matter what you say, baby, it's really good. I really like it.

    Love from the coast,
    Evan.

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