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I wait here in hell for an answer
While eagle feathers slice my soul
And ocean waves wash over me in sorrow
I beg to a God who is silent
That my lovesick wishes come true
And I will never leave this hell without you

You are worth the pain
You are worth the torture
You are worth my soul being eternally damned
But I am terrified that
I will perish in fire
Without ever knowing the touch of your hand

When you finally decide to answer
You say you wouldn't walk through hell
And heaven's just a lying fairy tale
I listen in tears as you answer
That you won't slay eagles or walk on water
And this goddamned place just got hotter

You're causing my pain
You're causing my torture
Are you worth my soul being eternally damned?
I am terrified that I will perish in fire
Without ever holding your love in my hands

I wait here in hell for a savior
While eagle talons slice my soul
And ocean waves crash over me in sorrow
I beg to a God for an answer
That my deepest wishes come true
And I will finally leave this hell without you

I am worth the pain
I am worth the torture
I refuse for my soul to be eternally damned
I would rather have it
That you perish in fire
And take control of my life back in my hands

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  • Midnite-Rae
    July 10
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    "You say you wouldn't walk through hell
    And heaven's just a lying fairy tale"
    I really liked those two lines.
    I'm not really sure what I liked about it, but I did like it.
    I really enjoyed reading it. I just can't pick out a certain part.
    You did a good job.
    Thanks for entering and Good luck in my contest.