maybe I'll be back someday
to hear you cry within the rain
maybe someday I'll pretend to care
just where you left your pain
because how you made me feel
that day on your front step
is no better, no worse than a beating, babe
for days, no- weeks, I wept
You hurt me bad, yes you did
I admit it; it's true
at one point in our relationship
I did in fact, Love you
but that love is gone, it's faded
and you'll never get it back
my dewy tears tell the story
of a teenage heart attack
let me know what u think. if it's good, bad, flows, etc....
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I liked this one a lot.
Some things seemed somewhat forced, but the overall message was shown great. Very sad. Many could relate to this piece.
Nicely done. -
I liked this one a lot.
Some things seemed somewhat forced, but the overall message was shown great. Very sad. Many could relate to this piece.
Nicely done.
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