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Cannibalistic Mind

Murderous thoughts swirling and twirling
through her cannibalistic mind

 

Her devilish plots, slowly unfurling

she watches her prey and follows behind

 

A primal growl and an animalistic leap

she descends onto the unknowing

 

Ripping and tearing the soft, tender flesh

lapping at the scarlet river flowing

 

However, her meal has only begun

and perhaps, you are the next one

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  • Jayde1
    August 8

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    great

    a chilling and dark piece of poetry

    Ripping and tearing the soft, tender flesh

    lapping at the scarlet river flowing


    loved this part.....

    from start to finish
    its a great poem


    well done



    jayde


  • rrw gold member
    August 3

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    good

    A creepy little story that reminds me of one of the storylines  in True Blood. This does have a slithery feel to it... The title is really nice... I like the idea of a cannibalistic mind... one that devours the soul....


  • Spooky Mind
    July 31

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    Cannibalism

    It's always a nice subject!
    second stanza, second line: Pray should be prey
    awsome poem, I really like the very last line though, making sure the reader knows the villian wont stop just because the poem is over is always a good move.
    great poem M.R.


    • MoonlitRoses
      July 31
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      Thanks for the comment. And, I don't know why I spelled that with an a...?? Haha, I guess I was rushing. Thanks for pointing that out =]


  • Miss Macabre silver member
    July 30
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    Oh wonderful! Such a dark poem with so much in so few lines!


  • annother gold member
    July 20

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    I love the imagery in this write. Excellent job! Best of luck.


  • Icy girl
    July 7
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    Wow I love this!!!I love, her last meal has only begun and perhaps, you are the next one...


  • Horcrux.Breathing
    July 6
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    woaw I love how savage and dark this is you paint a beautiful sinister picture in ones mind


  • xeroabyss II
    July 6

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    How intrepidly predacious.
    I love the last two lines.
    They give a nice bit of sadistic humor to the end
    -cheers


  • rainbows. gold member
    July 5
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    Awesome.

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