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Perfectly submitted
Yet the blankness is deceiving
Within there turns a world so full of thought
Full of wonder, full of fear
Anxiously awaiting
Staring straight beyond the glass
Soft and calm, alluring on the tender skin
Deep and pensive in the heart
Anticipating wonder
Fears and troubles bother
Yet perfections hold her forward
Unrelenting to her cause
Patience ever steady
Never flinching on the surface
The soul within has deepest yearnings
Perfectly submitted

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Well, it's been a while since I've entered a contest, but I loved the art and just wanted to enter my thoughts on it. Thanks.

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  • JinSays gold member
    July 8

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    Pix? Gawd, is that you? I havnet talked to you in months.
    How are you girl?
    Okay, well I love your write, it's lovely. It contains all the ingredients I was looking for. I love this part:

    Fears and troubles bother
    Yet perfections hold her forward
    Unrelenting to her cause
    Patience ever steady
    Never flinching on the surface

    Nice.
    Thank you.
    love Jin


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    July 6

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    I really love the very beautiful purrrrrrrrfect title thatcha came up with I also really love the alluring appeal to this poem of yours and I find it to be written with class and taste in mind anyways you chose the best words for your write here and your depth is very beautiful as well. anyways nice work all round and keep up the great work as always & good luck with the contest