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relentless

Give me a reason and i'll forget
This place, your face
There my biggest regret

Please leave me alone
I am trying to suffer
But you standing there crying
Is making me sober

I don't want to deal with this
(I don't want to remember)
That's why i am drinking
To forget this day;to forget this life

I am trying to erase you memory's
From my mind
But your voice is in my head  
And your tears in my eyes
You're painting my face red

If I close my eyes
Will you disappear
Will you be a memory
That fades slowly every year
Will you be that cold shiver (Whenever it rains)

Will you be that girl


These questions I have; I cannot answer
With you crying in my ears

And begging from your knees

 

 

Will you be that girl....

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I dunno i like it but i think there are a few lines that could be tightened up. What do you think???

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  • i like it, but at the same time i don't. it's good, but i can't help hating the overall message, maybe in fear of who its about.