Broken stars glinting from shattered mirrors
In fragmented shards of tattered images
Reflecting distortions with unjust perception
Refracting light in twisted deception
Broken stars glistening from weeping eyes
In cascading tears of remembered lies
Illuminating conceptions with veracious clarity
Denouncing the past of erroneous parity
Broken stars glittering from fallen angels
In fractured souls of forgotten times
Echoing whispers with soundless voices
Emitting cries of unheeded choices
Author notes
Title # 1 Broken Stars
A contest entry
- The Ten by lowercase prelude.
500 points, ended July 20, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I love how this sounds, the words flow well together and I like the overall form. Usually repetition strikes me the wrong way, but this fits the piece. Keep it up.
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Thank you so much for your comments
I too don't usually like repetition and this is the first time I have ever penned a poem in this format. There was just something about this title that compelled me into writing these muse as I did. I am usually more into rhyme, but it is always good to experiment with new ideas and ways of doing things!!
I am so happy therefore that you liked this!!
Hugs and sunny smiles
Marilyn
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