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[ I walk this path like a clumsy bird atop power lines ]

I walk this path like a clumsy bird atop power lines

Far too sensitive to watch where I'm going

I have a general dislike for people

But one in paticular

My heart is in the slums of your perfectly made bed...

Its in the sneer of your drum kit...

The keys of your piano...

And the apron you wore whilst impressing me with meals...

How is it possible that one person can feel so much for someone who chooses to end it all?

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  • Dead Hair
    July 19

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    "How is it possible that one person can feel so much for someone who chooses to end it all?"
    Trust me, I know how you feel.
    I like how you said everything you had to say in just a few words. Well done!

  • fanniesson
    July 18
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    tough subject
    excellent write here
    held my interest till the end