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Arise Darling

Encircling Her
That Scent, takes me away
She smells like an Alpine Lake
Our Breath floats on a winters Day

A contest entry

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  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    July 9

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    Such imagery in this very short piece here. You have really captured the 'moment' my friend - which for a short piece is sometimes so very hard to do. Very well done for this. Very very romantic this piece is too. Good luck in the competition.

    Be Seeing You
    On The Dark Road My Friend.

    Dark Wishes
    Wayne Leon


  • ladybug.
    July 5
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    Great take on the prompt! Good luck ♥


  • John Faulkner
    July 5

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    Misslelling on sent, should be scent....Use a small d on day, not Day..no big deal.Otherwise ,this is good. You did well. So there

    John


    • ParisianPoetry
      July 6
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      ha thanks i totally didnt realise i spelled that wrong. eyes wide closed obviously lol