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Always Let An Elephant Get It's Way

saw this grotesque, unexpected
wish could scrub my eyes clean of image
herald instinct
you find this is diverting and priceless
trying to provoke distaste
never wish this happen
the guide hides a smirk
while they shutter
and high fives about

cameras flash and videos watch it's gross oddity
shakes his head(third time this week)
he takes a deep sigh, says
"just let them finish off before we press on.
on these lengthy tours,they get agitated and bored.
elephants just want to have fun like you or me.
unless you like being stomped on, let them finish their natural activity."

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  • BluesMan gold member
    July 21
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    Good advice. Great tae on the prompt. Thank you for entering my contest.