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Creepy Crawling Things

It was a view of a cute little centipede.
He was so afraid and so fast.
Quickly he ran away into the vast world full of traps and spiders webs.

The daddy long leg spun his web.
He was looking good and cool.
Soon a little girl got a stick.
She tried to kill him.
He ran away so quickly.

Soon the rain began to pour.
The little worms couldn't stay underground anymore.
He was so vulnerable to the birds.

Creepy crawling little babies tomorrow will be a brighter day.
The sun will shine again over the bay.

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  • Unbreakable3
    July 20

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    I've never read a poem about insects before but as far as insects poems go this is pretty good! Thank you for entering!


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    July 15

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    This is so beautiful I like your little worm LOL. I love this line Soon the rain began to pour,the little worms couldn't stay underground any more. To many periods, yoou need commas. This is, excellent though.


  • DaWildChild
    July 9

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    Lovely

    Nice write i like the perception and imagery this brought as i read it- its a lovely and interesting write-thanks for sharing.


  • crivanea silver member
    July 8

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    i don't know what to think about this poem!..lol..I feel like laughing..the beginning is so cute..but at the same time..this poem says so much about society and future and just so much thought-provoking lines.. ex: The little worms couldn't stay underground anymore...so this poem can be a bunch of metaphors about society...hahha..maybe i'm reading too much into this..anyway...interesting poem..

  • Treasure 5 gold member
    July 8
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    This is really cute, little girl tried to kill him she must of been mad. Nice title I have one like that. Thank you for sharing


  • Olivias Violin
    July 7

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    Good choice of subject - the world of creepy crawlies

    and what a creepy photo

    I'm glad that you entered my contest


  • StillLovingYou
    July 5

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    i think it would sound better if it was : he ran away so quick.


    geeze are you having a spidery day?


    • Tqop
      July 5
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      Honestly, I hate spiders. I have a morbid fear of them. I thought looking at pictures of them would help ease my fear.

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