I look right through her pale blue eyes,
Filled with loss and sorrow.
Her lip trembles, her eyes are wide,
She's always afraid, can't you see?
No lies will hide her blackened eye,
Or the bones you can't help but see.
She longs for family, love, a home
She's forever lost, can't you see?
She doesn't dare go home, but has no choice.
The rules she must obey.
"I'm not good enough," she tells herself again,
She's wrong, can't you see?
I ask her always, again and again,
for fear of permanant damage.
But not once does she tell the truth,
She's just a child, can't you see?
A contest entry
- Make me feel. by Antebellum.
500 points, ended July 8, 55 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BEST KID POET OF 2009.. Five ROUNDS.. 5 THEMES!!! Kids from 4-15years ONLY!! by xXGoddessofPainXx.
400 points, ended July 14, 30 entries
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The first stanza there's a spelling error 'always' Apart from that this is a really nice poem, it's about hurt and friendship is what I can see.. Lovely writ
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I look right through her pale blue eyes,
Filled with loss and sorrow.
Her lip trembles, her eyes are wide,
She's alwyas afraid, can't you see?'
wow...this hits real close to home for me...
amazing write.
thanks so much for entering.
good luck -
I LIKE IT!
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