drip
drip
rubies and garnets fall
foggy hips
thunder lips
drip juices
wrists cut
by
a colorbind
suicidal
knife
impreg
nated
with kisses from passions lost
CRUCIFY ME
with your smile...
NAIL ME TO THE CROSS
with loving words made
of happy dreams
drip
drip
shimmer water falls
mark
ing
the
stead
y
pass
ing
of
time
as
it
drip
drip
drops away
like
wa
ter
drip
ping
down
a
wa
ter
fall
SUFFOCATE ME
with hugs of benevolent hatred
STAB ME
under the cover of precocious night
drip
drip
shimmering garnets fall
precious rubies drop
liquid red forms a pool
enough foreplay
kill me quick
no more suffering
(the after party in heaven is waiting for me)
so hurry in your dance of death
take me to your bed
and leave the room when done
drip
no more rubies
drop
no more garnets
drip
death awaits her cue in the wings
drop
no more drips
Author notes
i suggest whispering this (if not, saying it loudly), whilst keeping a beat (i tap my finger on the keyboard) every second to keep pace.
hopefully i'll be uploading the video of this.
UPPER CASE means semi screaming, (brackets mean whispering).
for voice, think well spoken english female, with an almost nursery rhyme-like voice...
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A contest entry
- Spoken Word by walkingstick98.
1000 points, ended August 4, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Um, wow. No.
Really, no.
You're capable of so much more than this. -
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yea i know... im losing my touch...
thanks for honesty kastor ^_^
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Good job, i really enjoyed this the flow was good and the story told was even better. Good luck in the contest
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awh thanks ^_^
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I like it. Saw you perform it lol, kinda came back to me.
Interestingly presented as words though - like how the words breaking up keeps the 'drip drip' theme going. It's cool. -
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you did indeed. i've recorded it now. it is currently being attacked by a team of hip hop djs...
thankies.
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oh wow. l-o-v-e it!!
I love the way you've set in out and the lines
"wrists cut
by
a colorbind
suicidal
knife
impreg
nated
with kisses from passions lost!
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awh thanks doom.
the strange line breaks show pauses; did that make sense when you were reading it?
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Very intricate...great expression.
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awh thanks ever so much.
just plain old curiousity, but did the way i decribed my voice, change any of it?
you don't have to answer, but i am curious. -
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Actually saying what each punctuation repressented was a very nice touch...makes for an added feel.
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awh thank you ^_^ i'll message when i get around to posting a video performance of this, if you are interested.
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