i vomit out the words you refuse to say
into ears deafened by silent excuses
you wrap me into a safety blanket of fear
whilst leaving me hanging on a thread
you lied to me
you
lied
to
me
i never lied to you
now stop this stupidity
pay back comes your way
listen to the pounding
of my black leopard heart
trying to escape its rib cage
every time you breathe on my neck
i hate you more than the word itself
you called me every dark name under the sun
but you are the one hiding from the moonlight
do you fear me?
is that the problem?
do you fear what i can do?
give up this fear
and wave good night a thousand times
but any more and you will not live til morn
Author notes
just a little fun with first person narration.
In a list
A contest entry
- Writer's block by glazecovered.
700 points, ended July 21, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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i really like it but not to much on the 2nd stanza. but all in all it was good
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thanks ^^
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i forgot to mention that i like the title, it is almost a bit of an oxymoron
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it is! thank you ^^ i didnt notice that lol
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there is goods imagery and interesting contrast in the poem, it is unique in its own way and seems to create a good balance in the mind, i think that the rhythm may have been slightly off, but it sounded good anyway, good job and good luck in future poems
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thank you ^_^
rhythm is off because its spoken word poetry, so it sounds better when i say it right, ya know?
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Some strange dark imagery in here. I rather enjoyed it.
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awh thanks a lot ^_^
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Interesting. I like the contrast between threats and softer parts.
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i believe its called having a short attention span. i get bored of the threats, then the romance, and then the threats... but it does make it a more interesting read lol
thanks hon.
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-is in love with this poem-
I love the beginning lines and the ending and everything enbetween. I loved the whole thing
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i didnt reply! thankies though hon <3
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ooooo dark an vengful with a real sense of repressed rage and power. i love it!
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awh thank you ^_^
gotta love rage, with a lashing of power; it sparks the most beautiful of images.
thanks again!
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nice poem lyk the part when u say
listen to the pounding
of my black leopard heart
trying to escape its rib cage
every time you breathe on my neck
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thank you ^_^
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