Grab some old planks and a two by four,
don't forget that hubcap for a door.
A piece of carpet and phone from the dump,
and pick up that broken bicycle pump.
Ask your dad for a hammer and some nails,
get the pulley, the rope, and the rusty pails.
Now, off to the big oak tree to make it,
high up on the branches, where it's gonna sit!
We bang and hammer hard all day long,
then rest a while and sing a silly song.
It's finally done and we're so very proud,
the roof will protect us from any rain cloud.
Climbing up into it we play and have fun,
every Saturday until the setting of the sun.
Years will come and years will pass,
but our house in the tree was made to last.
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Author notes
When I was young I always wanted to build a tree house and I wrote this thinking back to how I would have done it with my brothers and friends. I liked Shel's Sick poem, about the little girl trying to get out of going to school until she finds out it's Saturday.
Written March 22nd, 2004
A contest entry
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1600 points, ended March 30, 2008, 66 entries
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Thank you so much for entering my contest. This took me back to my childhood. I never had a tree house, but I built many a fort, tent, & teepee!
Thank you for this wonderful memoir to your youth.
As far as grammar & spelling: I didn't find any errors. The quotes at times seems a little cliche', but seem suitable as it seems written from the eyes an innocence of a child. Well done.
~*DJ*~
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Oh I've built plenty of tree houses in my day. It was always so much better in my mind than in real life though. But I guess, that's how most things are.
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*Sean : " I don't have a tree house. I live in an apartment. Nice poem."
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This is so cool! I remember just last year wanting more than anything to be able to build an awesome tree house. I never did though. Childhood fantasies mean LOTS of treehouses! My favorite line was-
Years will come and years will pass,
but our house in the tree was made to last
Good luck in the contest and thank you for entering! -
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Sweet poem and great flow of words. Good luck in the contest. -
quite ebautifully written indeed. wow yuears to come it was built to last very impresisve I tried makin my own club houses lmao needless to say I kept making forts instead of club houses. very nice poem and I enjoyed it alot. You certainly enjoyed my contest and Best of luck to you!
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I love this poem, it made me think back to my younger days when i so longed to have a tree house.
Great write X
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This is a beautiful poem. A very nice story, which I could relate to. I also would have liked it as a child to have a tree house, but since we lived in the city above my father's shop, we did not have a garden, let alone a tree.
The poem flows very nice and the rhyme is OK too. Well done. 
Anna.
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Good write, I like the format. Good luck in my contest and thank you for entering. La x
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This is a wonderful write! I did something like that as a younger child, and found it to be almost exactly as you described it here. It spoke to me, reminded me of the "good ol' days" as my parents call them.
Sorry. Rambling on. Anyway...
This is just how I remember this event in mmy life. I wish you the best of luck teaching your kids to make one, since you never got the chance.
Thanks for letting me re-live my childhood!
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great poem
I really liked this poem as well, but my son said the other poem wins hands down. He was very upset with me that I gave it third prize. It was his favorite poem of all times. He is eighteen years old, and loved the poem about the Box. This poem had tons of charm as well. I am not going to be very good at doing the judging of these contests, I get too involved. Thank you very much for entering my contest, I am so thrilled my first one went so well. -
I am sure lots of kids can relate to this. I too had a tree house. It is one of my fondest memories as a child. To actually read your poem brings me back to all those memories. What a way to start my day!
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I never had a tree house, but me and my brothers used to build temporary housings in the living room with the cushions from my mom's expensive furniture...we'd see how fast we could crawl through the tunnels we made, and laugh when we attacked each other while one of us was going through...good times...
and a good piece...nuf said
peace
Chris -
Very cute! The two-line stanzas give every effort in lending to the near Silverstein-esque childhood memories. I liked reading the whole thing, not just a few parts of it, which is to say that the entire thing is good (not just a few parts of it)!
It reminded me of my friend and I building our treehouse so long ago, it was our little mansion. Thanks for bringing back those memories in such a lighthearted way. -
i really love this poem--its the memories of growing up that count so much! i live to just reminise with the old gang about the stuff we used to build and the things we used to do! i love this poem its truely great!
keep up the excellent memories and i hope you remember them forever!
peace n' love
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Wonderful
This poem belongs in my contest.......Childhood Memories.
Check it out. The poem conjured up nice memories for your readers. That is what it is supposed to do. -
The heart never lies..but truth always hurts
Very cool fun poem reminds me of my childhood days in out treehouse....lol i love this its very cool!!!!! -
I'm humbled to have my silly work equated with such a touching write. Congratulations on a job well done, pardner.
Jane -
HELLA TIGHT
WOW this write was great! it reminded me of the great childhood days! excellent job! it kinda makes me want to go build a tree house in my backyard...even though its dark out...and we dont have any trees...ill FIND A WAY! WOOT! great job on the poem! 5 stars. check out some of my poetry sometime! adios! im off to builda my tree house!
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This poem ROCKS
This is really good. I normally don't like rhyming poetry, but this poem ROCKS!! I think it was a contribute to AllPoetry for you to right it! Very, very nice. -
This is a cheerful poem. It put me in a good mood. It brought memories to my mind, even though I never had a tree house.
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For me, this had great promise in the first three verses.
I felt that the meter was off in the fourth verse. Also it seemed to me that the last four verses descended from the plateau of the start and stayed on the plain (pun intended).
Great punctuation and spelling, flows well in most places.
Sorry, no fan of lip-service.
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very cute
and innocent poem i love it its very cheerful and brings back old memories of my tree house, its excellenT!!! GREAT JOB !
--JESSIKKA--
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that was so cute! this reminds me of buildung my first tree house except we had traps for the boys and sling shots and stuff but that was really cool!!!
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It's different, that's for sure. How did you come up with a tree house for your inspiration? It's a great write, I really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing!
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very good
good poem very well expressed -
Childhood memories were evooked when I read this, it was really good!
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I love this poem. Just imagine being up high in the sky alone. My son always loved his. I would go up in it with him and you could lay down and just dream. Great write and good luck in the contest.
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Yes, the judge is most certainly looking for entries, and I think this would be just fine. You are welcome to submit it to my contest
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Hi princeoffire
Really enjoyed this. Good idea having a tree house. Write good keep them coming -
This brings back memories of when I helped my son build his tree house. It never got a roof but he had a lot of fun in it all the same. I really liked the last two lines, tree houses like memories last forever.
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I really like this. I think you did a good job on it and made me want to lay in a tree house on a nice warm spring day. Great job on this. It's very cute.
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This is very cute. Would have been a great entry in the Shel Silverstein contest. Maybe since you just wrote it, you can ask the judge to make an exception for you. I know she is looking for entries.
Jennifer
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