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Demons


Smoke filled the night air, crisp and clear
None of them noticed evil was near
They laughed and joked and just went on
Not one of them saw anything wrong

A figure hiding in the shadows of the night
Just waiting for a moment that was right
Teeth sharp and yellow, eyes glowing red
This is not a monster found under your bed

This demon, is dreaming, plotting you know
She is straining to find a way into your soul
She feeds on your fears, drinks your all your tears
She becomes the only thing you can hear

She lurks in the bushes, hides in the trees
She is something your not likely to see
Pain invites her, anger gives her control
Soon dark and dead will be your soul

You ask what she is, and who she wants
She is every memory that is to haunt
Those broken, scared, alone and bruised
She's the unheard voices of all those abused

You give her power, when you just pretend
That there are not any demons within
But once you let her rule all the she sees
she fills the world with her incurable disease

She is the reason children cry out at night
She is the first sign that something isn't right
So instead of turning a blind eye her way
Try listening to what the abused have to say

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  • emma...
    August 29

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    This is amazing :] I love that, when comparing this to your 1st write on AllPoetry, you have kept your own defined style of writing and are still amazing at rhyming. Brilliantly creepy.
    Thank you for entering, and good luck in the contest


  • love.elizabeth
    August 10

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    Your ending line just struck me, in the face, violently like a jealous lover.
    Brilliant, iconic almost, and symbolic.
    Yes, yes, yes, they need to be heard.

    Thank you for entering.


  • MJ Forgives
    August 10

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    Wow while I was reading this I started to get scared for a moment. It reminds me of things. I am going to put this on the finalists list. I hope you do well thanks for entering. Hope I don't get nightmares .
    -Jess


  • Midnite-Rae
    August 3

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    I liked the rhyme and the way the poem flowed. I liked the dark part of it, but I didn't really think of it as abuse until I saw the categories and re-read it. This was well written. Thanks for entering and Good luck in my contest.


  • brokenheartedchild
    July 30
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    no name in AN sorry but i have to DQ


  • Miss Macabre
    July 29

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    This is a chilling write with a very dark tone. I can't think of any suggestions, this is well rounded poem with a decent rhyme scheme and wonderful flow. It has a sorrowful, and like I said, dark tone. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • Antebellum
    July 27

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    'She is the reason children cry out at night
    She is the first sign that something isn't right
    So instead of turning a blind eye her way
    Try listening to what the abused have to say'

    A sad story, but an amazing write.
    thanks for entering.


  • NyteShade
    July 23
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    Thank you for your entry and good luck


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    July 13
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    Raw message given
    A nightmare of thoughts are shared
    Thank you and best wishes to you
    Julie


  • awitersheart
    July 8

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    Creepy

    Scary kinda makes you sit back and think of what is inside. Good poem I love it cannot wait to read it in the dark
    Good luck in the contest.


  • Jade.Butterfly gold member
    July 6

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    O0o0o0o0o, this was freakishly scarey!!
    Yowzers..it's dark here and i can tell you right now i'm spooked!..great write


  • glenn shannon silver member
    July 5

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    mighty powerfull and chilling indeed its daylight here and im spooked the hell out lol thanks for entering and good luck, hoisting up my pants.

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