An icy orb floating
In the velvet blanket sky ~
Cotton wool
Author notes
In three lines. About the moon. In the modern haiku style which is not necessarily syllables of 5,7,5
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A contest entry
- Guiding Light #3 by Dreamer With Dreams.
850 points, ended July 8, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PREWRITE HAIKU-SENRYU CONTEST! by MysteriousWhisper.
450 points, ended August 17, 97 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
yay or nay??
Comments
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interesting look on the moon. very original and unique. great job and good luck in the contest!
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In the velvet blanket sky
I like that line very much and this Haiku is written
well that one can see the image just by reading
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Your photo print highlights the power of your words and they are full of terrific imagery..Welldone...All the best in the contest!
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nice
brevity and the hot cold...all rolled up into one ...well done...from icy cold to the cozy cotton wool, this one stays on the mind...lingering a bit longer!
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So creative!
Ever since I was little, I have loved to look at the moon. If I had the ability to fly, I would travel there in a heartbeat. This haiku is a brilliant take on the photo prompt. This one will surely stick in my memory.
I tried to comment on your work yesterday, but my computer was being so slow and stubborn. Here goes again.
Don
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Very nice depiction of the moon here, I like the Haiku style but I am not really digging deeply into it as of yet. I am looking at the western haiku where nature is not the only medium for the message.
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hey thankyou so much for your up lifting comments on my poems hun xx
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You are most welcome, I usually try to stay positive and let the poet know what thier works bring out of me.
Sometimes I go bezerk and write some poetic abstract comments but sometimes I stay down to earth, so far so good.
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Nicely written Haiku. It has that surprise ending like they are suppose to be. I like it you did a good job. Me I suck at Haiku so stay away from it. Thanks for sharing.
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I love that this is a beautifully written haiku! Nicely penned, thanks for entering, and good luck in my contest!
Safely hidden in the darkness,
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Good one Kaylee! Beautiful picture of the moon too!
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That was really pretty,kaylee. You wrote about the moon so beautifuly in this.
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hehe ty babes Ive added a picy to this piece now
xx
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well then the whole cotton wool line makes more sense now
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