Her eyes are hollow and black,
mind versitile and cursed all the way.
She has a wall to protect from attack,
watching over her shoulder all day.
A victim once upon a time,
now she's hard as stone.
Muddled in the midst of crime,
not caring about being alone.
Tangled long hair trails down her cheeks,
never ending survival to get through the day.
Her convulsing mind and heart shrieks,
Revenge is all she wants to take it away.
Ending up in a cell as a result,
on the cold cement surface.
Finally she can allow her self,
to feel the pain
He's dead!
Author notes
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yes yes yes! love the hate, love the subject, love the everything. i like it when you write anger and pain like this. it is raw and appealing. another great write. thanks for entering this one xxx
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Good Luck!
This is a bit scary! I dislike centre aligned poems, but since it was a prewrite I suppose it couldn't be helped.
"Muddled in the midst of crime"
That's my favourite line, it just seems to slot perfectly into the rhythm and sums the poem up.
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Good write
Thank you for entering
& Good luck
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not caring about being alone. - ah from an enlgishman to an englishwoman, that is our way, to be stoic, riase the hate and scream inside, but not any more, the world is changing. we all have to feel and share the apin. and then we die.
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o.0 This was great. I could feel the emotions in this write you did a wonderful job on this piece. I think I have found my second fav writter next to ears2hearyou. Thank you for sharing.
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Very profound....
I loved the rhyme in this, as well as the message about domestic violence. It's a real shame that there are so many women in prison today who were only protecting themselves from the men who claimed they loved them. It's very common in the United States. Many of the battered women here have been imprisoned for life, even when they were defending their own children from physical, or sexual abuse. I think there is something clearly wrong with that.
The American actress, Farrah Fawcett (who recently passed away), once portrayed a battered wife in a television movie called THE BURNING BED, who eventually went to prison for killing her husband by setting his bed on fire after one of his drunken rampages. I'm not sure if it was a true story, but Farrah did such a beautiful job in that role. She played that type of role on two occasions. She was always one of my favorite actresses.
Best wishes to you in this contest with this excellent piece of poetry.
Don
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wow that's an awesome comment; thankyou huni and I am so glad that you understood this write
yeyy!!! I may have to watch that film one day x
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You're welcome.
They showed it on television here in the U.S. a day or so after she passed. I've seen it at least four times, since she was one of my favorites ever since she got her start in the 70s on CHARLIE'S ANGELS. I had a HUGE crush on her when I was about 8. I think every boy in the United States did. Not only was Farrah a beautiful woman in life, she loved her family more than anything in her life. She passed from anal cancer earlier this month at 62. I believe that she is in a very good place now, and watches over her family the way she did in life. Both of the films I saw her in have been especially made for television. I don't know if they are on DVD, but they could be. I really don't care to see victims of any kind of violence being imprisoned for defending themselves, or their children. It's a serious flaw in our court system. I can imagine it might be similar in Great Britain, considering this poem you wrote.
Don
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