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Alpha's Omega

I take her hand into mine;
Cold skin shocks me into a new cognition.
She's beautiful,
but she hates me.
What is it she wants?
Love?
I can give her love.
But no,
She wants more...
She wants everything...
She pulls me against her body,
her breath kisses my neck.
"Now close your eyes...
for I am death..."
Here
in the palms of mortality
I feel most alive

Author notes

Feeling very inspired by Jim Morrison's poetry, being the anniversary of his death was a few days ago. This is the first free verse I've ever done so it was a little weird for me.

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  • Ruetry
    October 22
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    wow... amazing feeling and imagery


  • cgirl0410
    July 11

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    Dark Yet Beautiful

    I loved this. It is so unexpected from the beginning to the end. Love the shock factor and the surprise. This is a really fabulous piece. Great write. - cgirl0410


  • tearrsofthemoon
    July 6

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    This is fantastic. It was a really beautiful peace, the words flow together wonderfully and it seems you have no trouble with free verse whatsoever. Excellent job poet, another beautiful write.


  • Vickie Rosa
    July 5

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    WOW A RICH PIECE

    This was great, and a little mysterious. Can be taken many ways. I loved this my friend. Wonderful write. Bravo. Peace be with you.