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Something from my apartment





The black cat lays low upon the cool patio
the laundry hangs upon the strung up balcony

crispy hot and ready to be

wrapped around shower wet skin.

I am led on my front, inspirited with the fizz
of freshly iced water
striped socks play dead
on the white kitchen tiles where
plastic bags of cold yellow curry wait to be tossed.

I am spurred to spill my spirit to
the silver man that lives in my fridge
and to confess my envy to the sizzling
flipped burgers he ketchups nicely.

Planes skyrocket, boats aspire to the sphere and
I pack my rucksack
with talcum powder and camera film.
Citronella burns sour and seeps into the
bountiful bicep’s of the moist air

as I dry solid in cream candle wax.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • landmark
    July 24

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    very nice work. your imagery really captures this summer scene well.

    please put your AP name space out like this: a l g e d o n i c
    as well as the prompt in your author's notes.

  • These lines stood out the most:

    bountiful bicep’s of the moist air
    as I dry solid in cream candle wax.

    I felt like perhaps I was a tomato plant on a sill but then I could not be certain for a vegetable patch on the patio is most likely not what you are alluring to here.

  • Macsword
    July 7

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    Damn. Too Cool

    Wish I had an apartment. Wish I had a room alone. That muse might flow as beautifully.

    Poet....Bravo!


  • Garmond gold member
    July 6

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    What an utterly stunning write. I smiled with:

    "striped socks play dead
    on the white kitchen tiles..."

    That is so simple but exceptional.. still smiling infact.

    Oh I so hope you really do still shoot film... digital has all but killed the warmth and purity of transparency and I get excited any time someone mentions film. Kodak or fuji or Ilford?

    I loved this, you have painted with a sharp brush and it exudes such a carefree, breezy feeling.


  • DolceVito gold member
    July 5
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    Superb piece, excellent imagery, beautifully written

  • Rowan gold member
    July 5
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    amazing.

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