No more colour, no more life left in me
Drown it all in the inky night sky
Everything black, nothing left to feel or see
Drown my world, turn it black with dye.
Watch the moon tremble, feel the black rain
See the sky melt and engulf my mind
Feel the memories seep from these veins
I can't see, I can't feel, I'm living blind.
Turn my whole world into my own shadow
Colour has no place here, darkness is home
Take refuge in the night that resembles a crow
I know in the darkness I will always be alone.
Watch from afar as the moon is swallowed by black
Now there's no colour, no light, no life to be seen
No one can see all the fine qualities I lack
No one can see what a disappointment I've been.
Ash from countless fires falls like fresh snow
Make little black snow angels on the invisible ground
No one will care because no one will know
Life and colour is dead and with them went sound.
Light was erased from the sky with black ink
I'm finally free in this dark, sightless jail
Free from myself, I am left to think
And my sinking ship of sanity is set to sail.
Author notes
Wow.
A lot darker than I usually go. And also, the vein reference in the poem wasn't meant to represent self harm but if you want to take it that way, be my guest.
Reviews would be awesome.
Thanks!
A contest entry
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Comments
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" Watch the moon tremble, feel the black rain
See the sky melt and engulf my mind
Feel the memories seep from these veins
I can't see, I can't feel, I'm living blind"
two thumbs up.. VERY good.. truely enjoyed every word of it... dark and brilliant.. i stand no chance of winning now ) :
hope you win big though..
Good luck
Vonnie
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love love love it! speaks to me on so many levels and i adore that it is that dark, its what i wanted. enjoyed reading every part of it.
thank you for your entry
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a very good effort!
once you start a pattern, you should stick with that pattern; you start with first-person and switch to second; your rhyming scheme is sound and the poem is a good idea. i like the idea
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