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bee's

bee's there yellow little
things they swarm
like bumblebees round
and round buzzing buzz
bee's there hairy like trees
they shake trees for honey to give to miss bee

so thats my bee's
they sting and fling
and pop
like ballons in the sky
so thats mr and m.bee

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  • greyhaime
    July 6

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    welcome to allpoetry

    this is an interesting write, I liked it, although you have a few spelling errors in there.over all well done! thanks for joining the site and thank you for sharing this with us here,
    cheers



  • morgana raven Greeters member
    July 5
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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    I like the imagery in this piece. However I think that where yuo have written 'there yellow little' and 'there hairy like' I think you meant 'they're'. Other than that, nice write. Welcome to the site, if you have any questions please feel free to ask.
    Laura,
    Site-greeter.


  • flyfly gold member
    July 5

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    Unique

    I must admit I have never read anything along the lines you have written, (not meant as a criticism) and had to read it a couple of time before I realised that is what you intended the reader to do.  Thank you for sharing with us poemboomer666.