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sycamore tree

here by the bended elbow

as the water passes

i find the lonely sycamore

bowed towards the sky

and i feel his despondency,

age and twisted arms

 

unfurled in asking

why am i still here

 

he searches as do i

for the mention of spring

towards distant horizons

and i am but a twig,

a child again in his branches,

feeling the strength flow

 

then years come

the wind blows

age denies him grace

 

as if i am aging

with eyes that never see

the wisdom in his torso

how i've grown with his memory

steadfastly loyal

 

coping with seasons

and changing tides

 

 

 

 

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  • There is so much here in this piece. I wish my own writing skills were as simplistic and lovely as yours. One thing, though, is that the last two lines appear to not be needed, as it stunts the pace of it. Just giving my two cents.

  • you are truly a natural poet...everything you write just flows that way


  • DolceVito gold member
    July 6
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    Superb poetry, awesome take on the prompt

  • Lovely poetry, Chez. We watch with wonder the things of nature that endure the seasons and years and sometimes come to know a different kind of strength because of it...and voracitiy becomes tenacity. I've noticed the older I get, the more quiet I become, like your sycamore, my language growing inwardly in rings and my eyes and arms leaning to a less tangible horizon.



    ~Karen

  • A sensitive, thought-provoking piece of poetry. And very well-executed! Keep the faith

  • It made me think of my grandfather.

  • mcheadle
    July 5
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    Strange how life changes us

    We try going from day to day and all the while many days have slipped away...mac

  • awesome. i love the interaction here. constancy is a beautiful thing...a grace in and of itself. lovely poetry.

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