I watched the world from the height of trees that had grown too long, ignoring death’s determination to suck the pulse from its trunk. the sky was bathed in ethereal substances, as if the gods had clustered in a clandestine circle debating whether or not their financial situation was recession or poor counting.
I held the stars like paper, coiled up my finger.
and I could see everything.
I could see five people’s eyes burst in suspense as the killer with a glinting knife walks closer. I could see the fumbling of two hands and two hearts, combining lust and destruction in stained scarlet sheets. I could see two sisters crying at a grave sparked by moonlight.
I was god,
or the equivalent to.
‘won’t you miss being human; miss the scent of a fresh morning or the scalding coffee on your stark white t-shirt?’
secretly inside i was nothing but human. I was mortality wrapped in seaweed and passed off as oxygen so the fish wouldn’t drown. neutrons ate away at my chest, gnawing on the guilt displaced between my heart and the ashes of my ribs.
but I smiled like I held planets beneath my tongue.
‘of course not, I’ll have everything I’ve every wanted.’
then I ran home and collapsed,
tearing rubies from my arm.
the wind picked up and lashed sand under my fingernails.
I knew I should feel something. mourn maybe.
but the seas still roared, still fed the world with distance. the sun still showed what was better left unseen and the speckles of mud on your skull still sat there, unmoving.
your death meant nothing to the world.
changed nothing.
so why should it for me?
they crept quietly with words that I guess were meant to calm me. make me breathe.
but they were wrong in their conviction.
I was not alright.
the trees are still there and I can almost taste death’s fury that they have not yet collapsed. they are enlarged now, coming closer. I can almost touch their leaves, almost feel their photosynthesis.
I am god once again,
at least
until the next time gravity visits.
Author notes
Prompt: carnival.
this is based round the feris wheel.
about being ontop of the feris wheel, going back down, then going back up uncertain of when you'll go back down.
all in metaphor!
woah!
xD
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what everyone down below said.
I have nothing more to add becuase you are just such a stunning writer.
am i inflating your ego yet
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Whoa. Wow.
then I ran home and collapsed,
tearing rubies from my arm.
- Incredible.
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I held the stars like paper, coiled up my finger.
whoa! Gorgeous
Omg- that's so so brilliant. Wow, I didn't realise and now it makes sense. Unbelievable. wow
the brilliance of your writing is so incredible.
writingfree
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I really like the "recession or poor counting" - it makes me think of the gods as children and is a lovely image
I don't think you need the "to" at the end of the first section - but that could just be me LOVE the "wrapped in seaweed" part - that was beautifully done the "crept quietly" was a great image, I love the feeling of insidiousness there and the ending, well that is just typically you - brilliant!
Polly
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damn, you comments always pawn mine.
no fair
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this was great. i mean.. extended metaphor = wow.
they crept quietly with words that I guess were meant to calm me. make me breathe.
but they were wrong in their conviction.
I was not alright.
- uh.. dayum?
I am god once again,
at least
until the next time gravity visits.
- endings going out with a bang = my lover. this was great.. it closed it really nicely but still kept you thinking.
overall.. uh. awesome
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secretly inside in was nothing but human. I was mortality wrapped in seaweed and passed off as oxygen so the fish wouldn’t drown. neutrons ate away at my chest, gnawing on the guilt displaced between my heart and the ashes of my ribs.
but I smiled like I held planets beneath my tongue.
‘of course not, I’ll have everything I’ve every wanted.’
The ferris wheel is my favorite part of the carnival. This was brilliant.
♥
B
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