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boys are yucky

 

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I dream of Kool Aid tea parties

with Santa Claus, and the queen of England,

and mommy too, because she's beautiful.

 

I'm a fairy-ballerina-princess

this is my husband, Prince Charlie.

We can dance for you.

Charlie says we're destined for stardom.

He loves me just the way I am.

 

When we grow up, we'll get really married,

and have 31 teddy-bear kids.

 

My daddy says that fact makes him proud,

(that means good),

and to stay away from mean boys

like Tommy.

 

Tommy says for a dumb girl,

I'm almost pretty.

He wants me to kiss him but I won't.

 

He says teddy bears can't have babies,

so when we grow up, we'll have our own.

Easy as making puppies, he said.

 

But I love Charlie. He doesn't pull my hair,

and I dontlike puppies,

 

I like teddy-bears.

 

Besides that,

Tommy has boy-germs,

smells of toad-poop,

and he loves to eat his snot...

 

...and I think that's just gross.

 


 

 

 

 

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Author notes

Background images by steve o'connell-take your partners i, ii, iii
Made for me by Kat.
DO NOT SNAG.

Prompt:
A heart that loves is always young.
The title is a Greek proverb.

A girl's teddy bear is always her first love. I thought your picture prompts were adorable, but have had this image for forever, and thought I might bring it out. Thank you.

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  • BeckyBeach
    July 10
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    thats the cutest poem i've ever read!


  • xXxIceQueenxXx
    July 10

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    Such an adorable poem! I think you capture the mind-set of this young child very well!! Congrats on the Gold!


  • imperfect girl
    July 9

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    This is great! This is something that just aout every little girl goes through and you display it beautifully Good job.

  • silverfish
    July 8

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    i like the way the poem tells a story we all know so well: that you never forget your first love. -tedphish


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    July 8

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    I adore teddy bears, I adore the pictures, but most of all i adore this poem ... Jin this is brilliant, even I remember some of those feelings, be it a long time ago, although I think with time most womens opinions of men change ... just slightly

    Congratulations on the so deserved gold.

    Love.
    Sue

    Loved the last stanza ... so disgusting!!!


  • xochocoholicxo
    July 7
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    lolz how cute the little girl here is so true i wish we were all still that innocent


  • Daizee silver member
    July 7

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    I think every little girl in your female readers will thank you for the trip back to our childhood. This one thanks you


  • Dalaney gold member
    July 7

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    I loved reading this because it's raining outside and

    gloomy and I needed a dose of 'little girl' dreams

     

    Love, Lane

     

    PS:  Congrats on the GOLD!!


  • Sky Princess
    July 7
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    Lol, this is hacka cute!! i loved it!! especially how u wrote it!!! Greatly written!!1


  • Solo Wisp gold member
    July 6

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    What grabs me is the in-character rings so true .. there is no veering away and this poem daintily rolls about in comical turns that ring true for the character, in that precious moment- one can only smile or laugh.

    Do I like it .. yep.

    Congrats on the Gold .. truly amazing poem, doll.

    ~Steve


  • Festering Eye Sore
    July 6

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    This was so adorable! I think it would be difficult to resist the purity of young love with a side of cuddly teddy bears.


  • Young andRestless
    July 6

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    haha

    that was an interstingly awesome write. i feel the emotions of children are often the most pure. you exemplified their thoughts fantasticly...congrats
    keep writing

    -scott


  • Lunaex
    July 6

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    ok..... uh...

    this was a very interesting write. i have never experienced anything like that. i was always a little emo kid, never wanted to do anything...... oh well. your write was good and i guess thats all that matters. good job, keep it up. and well, you know all the rest.


    • j i n gold member
      July 6
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      you never experienced being a kid?
      okay, thanks for the comment just the same.
      Love,
      jin


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    July 6

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    Interesting and just what little girls think about - and I should know because I used to be one as well. I think you must be very clever to write like that and very creative too. Well done.

    • j i n gold member
      July 6
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      yes thank you. It helps that I have little girls not too much older than this one. It also helped that I was oncce this little girl.
      Thanks for the read and the applause.
      Love always,
      jin


  • silverscent gold member
    July 6

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    This is genius. I was laughing and saying "aww" at several parts of this write.
    "we'll get really married," was one part that I could identify with most just for the fact I remember saying those words when I was a little girl (and that wasn't all that long ago )
    Thank you for entering this. It made my day.


  • rollingzen
    July 6
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    lol!!


  • X.brokenlover.X silver member
    July 6
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    wow this is amazing i miss these days


  • Black Narcissus gold member
    July 6

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    *Relives his childood pleasure of eating snot*

    I miss those days

    Wonderful Poem.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    July 6

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    this is really cute.
    Thank you for the smile.


    love,
    Delila


  • awannabepoet
    July 6

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    Oh my, I could not help but smile after I read this and then I read it again for good measure and still I could not wipe that grin off my face.

    Thank you for injecting this bit of goodness into my already pretty decent kind of day.

    I like it, I like it so!


  • Badass Brea
    July 6

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    I loved this poem, it portrays what I consider to be the classic little girl, from being a ballerina to tea parties. I absolutly loved this! I smiled the whole way through remembering my teddy bear children & make-beleive husbands with happily ever after.

    Thanks for the reminiscience of being a little girl all over again!

    Loved it!


  • DeJaBlue gold member
    July 6

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    Very cute I love the youthful innocence you feel as you read...makes me wish my two girls could stay little forever, lol.


  • laurel
    July 6

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    i loved this =)
    it was so cute, and i agree.. boys are yucky.
    loved the end of the first stanza.


  • DolceVito gold member
    July 5

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    Beautiful; lol, I'll be forever young, according to that Greek proverb; therefore, yucky, according to Jin Beautifully done


  • caitlinlea
    July 5

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    SO Cute!!

    This is so cute and funny...I love it...it brings back memories in more than one way!! =-D

    A+ for originality and appeal!! LOVE it!!!!


  • Whispers of Hope
    July 5
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    awww this is such a cute poem! I really enjoyed reading it!


  • Toxic Angel
    July 5
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    reminds me of when i was a little girl lol.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    July 5

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    LOL! I just love the way that you put this all together! A great thought for this picture prompt that you found here my friend. It's always a pleasure to read you and I am glad that you featured this for all of us to read. Have a wonderful week ahead and thanks a lot for sharing your talent here. All the best to you in this contest and all your future endeavors here!




    Jeremy0826


  • PurpleAnarch
    July 5

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    XD i love this.
    I'm preoccupied, i think I'll have to come back to it, and tell you... why I like it. But... kids.


  • Odds and Ends
    July 5

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    this was endearing and true. i think that's why i've found most of all that i read by you is enticing. to the point, endearing, true.

    loved this piece. thank you for the opportunity to read!


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    July 5

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    I love your sense of humor Jin. You should let it out more often.

    But I love Charlie,
    he doesn't pull my hair,
    and I dont want puppies,
    I want teddy-bear kids.

    Besides that Tommy has boy-germs,
    smells like toad-poop,
    and he's always eating his snot...

    ...and I think that's just gross.

    This ending is priceless.

    Mike


  • dismantle-me
    July 5
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    Unbelievably cute. I like the way it's childish but not overly so.


  • explain.everything
    July 5

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    aww.......thats just so cute and sweet.... however, 31 teddy-bear kids is A LOT of teddy-bear kids. im surprised daddy didnt talk her down to like 3 or 4 or maybe 5 teddy-bear kids.... but this was reallllllly cute. haha. silly tommy. little girls dont love boys. they love teddy bears. =]]]


  • tdawnhughes
    July 5
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    this is adorable i love teddy bears!!!! good job


  • mcope8050
    July 5

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    this is cute as can be,,,,

    how adorable is this???? EXTREMELY!!!!!! from the picture at the begginig,,, to the idea that that "A heart that loves is always young" well worded and well conveyed to the reader,,, an enjoyable read,,, thanks for sharing this with me/us


  • C.orruption
    July 5

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    Aww

    So cute! Love the whole teddy bear thing, it made me smile.

    Keep up the great writing,
    ~C~


  • therenaissancegirl
    July 5
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    utter kawaii-ness!

    It reminded me of my own little kid years lol except my Tommy was named Elijah haha


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    July 5

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    Brilliant sis
    A fun yet honest write that paints the images words of thoughts.
    I adore that image, I have two origionals like that
    of little girl ballet dancers.
    take care
    and keep on penning
    Julie x


  • Pure Thought silver member
    July 5
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    SUch a cute tone to this... as adaddy and a man I can understand the aversion to boys...lol

  • black is black
    July 5

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    Aww this was adorable. I hope my little girl thinks the same way...at least for a good few years lol Well done


  • white stone gold member
    July 5

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    I think a teddy bear is probably the best choice in this case. Those booger eating kids are nasty. Playful tone here, enjoyed.


  • Dryad Enya
    July 5

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    I love this! I grew up without any teddy and the drawing in your poem will do for me, the respect of this poem, the love and emotion so sweet and adorable!

    'Besides that Tommy has boy-germs,
    smells like toad-poop,
    and he's always eating his snot...'

    The whole piece was just building up to this and how true it still is! this is beautifully written and by an expert i see!

    Best of luck,
    Gorecki


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    July 5

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    I want my teddy bear back sissy.. please PLEASE.. I knew I left him somewhere. this is wonderful, so full of hope and life and childhood innocence. who could ask for anything more. wow, this brought emotions that I thought I'd lost forever.. the part that made me laugh was the eating snot part and yes it grossed me out too.. no wonder daddy was proud. his little girl was in love with innocence and teddy bears. before boys and complications in life began when all things were different and simpler. we were little and we were daddy's little girl. how could a father not be proud of that?

    this deserves GOLD in my book, and it always will. I made myself a promise that I wouldn't cry today.. damnit you made me break it.. but it's okay today.. it was worth it.

    beauty within these words, a meaning that holds so much ..

    this is what poetry is all about.

    but but
    I still can't get the picture of Tommy eating his snot out of my head ewwwwwwwwwwww

    Good Luck
    Kat



  • Antonio Valentino
    July 5
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    Too cute!

    Antonio

  • Juno101
    July 5

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    thanks for picking my poem, it was my first contest. Great poem, very playful and it has good rhymes. it really went amazing with the picture.

  • mcfreeman
    July 5
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    who knew....

    snot eating would get such a reaction.


  • TwiztidMaggot
    July 5

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    this is pretty good. haha, the last few lines kind of cracked me up... yeah, boys are kinda gross... but you know the saying... can't live with em, can't live without em. haha. Keep up your great work! I wish you the best of luck

    TwiztidMaggot


  • Dark Geometry
    July 5
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    This was absolutely brilliant. I giggled!


  • charcoal
    July 5
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    31 teddy bear kids

    lol

    love it


  • Ta Sodrow
    July 5
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    Thats awesome ... straight back to childhood

    The last stanze is superb, it reminds of many kids I have taught.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 5

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    As a boy I don't suppose I should like it, but I do

  • Sarge
    July 5
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    WOW! This is amazing, I so agree with it, and espaecally the title.


  • Mango Memories gold member
    July 5

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    awww!!!

    I LOVED THIS.


    LOVE LOVE LOVE.


    it was so beautiful. and made me smile and chuckle!

    well done on a great write!


  • redbarchettadrive gold member
    July 5
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    Awesome write j i n!
    I really liked this!


  • Cannonsfire gold member
    July 5

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    lol just what does toad poop smell like C

    • j i n gold member
      July 5
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      lol...I dunno, but I bet it smells yucky.
      this was so stolen from Maura.
      too bad I didnt get the bowl of juicy flies in there


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    July 5

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    this is adorable!!!
    love the last stanza...
    good luck in the contest.

    Juls


  • Rose Angel gold member
    July 5

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    Ha..such innocence and so typically feminine in thought. Beginning to end adorable..I have nieces that I identified with as I read..Best of luck in this contest!...Know you will do well! sis Top honors!

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