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The Chant of the Cursed

Painted image on a scrolls that are painted
Taken adage on the souls that are taken
Sainted leaders you assume are sainted
Forsaken breeders, banned and forsaken
Passion of verse becomes their new passion
Violent the curse that’s persistently violent
Compassion is lost with death of compassion
Silent the cost for the anguish that's silent
Chanting this verse with the freedom of chanting
Created the curse that you have created
Granting your sentence unknowingly granting
Sedated repentance bliss is sedated
     Exemption was crossed there is no exemption
     Redemption is lost forget your redemption

 

 

 

 

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Shadow Sonnet with internal rhyme

Prompt: Use feminine rhymes.
This poem has 30 feminine rhymes total.

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  • Black Narcissus gold member
    July 25
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    Once again your prowess at form leaves us tyros speechless.

    Simply beautiful.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 25

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    Marvellously clever, the internal rhymes are so smooth they scarcely notice, and the poem itself is superb. Of course I can find no fault with the feminine rhyming.

    Jeff


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    July 12

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    have to say i am not a huge fan of form poetry because not many people can do it well but you are just brilliant. I am very impressed

  • laiqua aran
    July 11

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    Simply stunning!
    To take such a difficult form, fill it with feminine rhyme, that so many people find hard to grasp, and then add internal rhyming, while keeping the whole as a real poem shows that you are indeed the Queen of form, and to put it more simply, you are a poet.

    L a


  • crivanea silver member
    July 11

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    Wow.... It been a while since I read one of your poems...and I have almost forgotten how talented you are!! Love the word play, very creative ! Internal rhymes/ a sonnet!?! Impressive! Wonderful job!


  • Age of Rain
    July 9
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    Freaking FANtastic!

  • Purrsanthema
    July 8
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    Show off !!!!!!!!!!


  • awannabepoet
    July 8

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    The cursed could not once behold such mastery of the rhyming scheme, for what is begotten onto those that would get but nothing when in all fact they have everything.

    All one needs to do is learn to read and then perhaps they can play thier part on this never ending play of the heart of hearts.


  • Desire gold member
    July 7
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    What in the World!


    Holy Shindig
    First I had to ask myself- what is a feminine rhyme
    then I was like...Ooooooooooh I am Lovin this one
    And on top of this~ You did a Shadow Sonnet
    -throws hands in the air-

    What to do- What to do
    Yep she can reach the summit alright
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    July 7
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    Sis, I have said this before - you don't do things by halves!


  • nordicsky silver member
    July 6

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    I loved the ebb and flow of this poem but I cannot see why these rhymes are described as feminine.
    Rhymes like, painted and sainted or passion and compassion seem to be devoid of gender.
    Perhaps passion and compassion are feminine virtues but this does not hold true for many of the rhymes.
    I also wondered about the internal rhyme. Does using the same word at the beginning and end of a line count as an internal rhyme?

    Still, as ever, I loved the sound of your poetry, even if the complexities of form baffle me.

    Love, Peter


    • Amera gold member
      July 6
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      You touched on two subjects I love; the first you already know and that is having your signature on my poetry with your comments. The second is that I love to teach what little I know about poetry.

      The technique of starting and ending each line with the identical word or two words that are homophonic is a form known as the Shadow Sonnet. It has been recognized by several major Universities and across the Internet; the guidelines can be found here:
      http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/types.html

      Next, the feminine rhyme is not as the name implies as it neither sounds feminine nor does it mean something that is softer. Feminine rhymes are rhyming words that have two or more syllables and the last syllable in unstressed. You might note that sonnets typically have 10 syllables per line but if they.end in a feminine rhyme then you will see 11 syllable lines. Read Shakespear’s Sonnet 20, he used all feminine rhymes.

      Love,
      Amera


  • Faeryn
    July 5

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    What amazes me is that you manage to use all the feminine rhymes and have the same word repeated in each line and do not have it sound forced or boring. This is so fantastic and I love to read it aloud. When read aloud the words are so powerful; especially the last 2 lines. Wow.
    Love,
    Tay


  • Andre ben-YEHU
    July 5

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    Profound ponderings...


    Outstanding composition... "Chant of the Cursed" is unique; rich in imagery and contents... A poetic majestic.

    Much gratitude for sharing "The Chant of the Cursed".

    In admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • blueyez
    July 5

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    Excellent and such a challenging form to write in!!!! You amaze me every time


  • Ceridwens Soul silver member
    July 5
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    Nicely done Amera. I'll be directing the sonnet class to this one for sure.

  • Papagallo
    July 5

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    I find all of your work most enjoyable. Are you perhaps a well know poet hiding behind Amera's name? Or maybe a "muse" on the loose? Anyway, this is a wonderful write!


  • Black Narcissus gold member
    July 5
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    Do you give lessons ? I'll pay.

    Wonderful.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    July 5

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    Of course it's feminine rhyme... you wrote it... LOL

    This style so fits a chant PERFECTLY!


  • darkyinsoul
    July 5

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    Superb as alawys my friend
    you never fail to impress me..
    The form and flow
    excellent..
    Thanks for the share
    Darky


  • melphleg gold member
    July 5

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    Girl, must you improve on your own form and make it even harder to write? How does one keep up with you?


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    July 5

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    Wow...I am nearly speechless Amera.

    When I grow-up poetically, I want to be just like you.


  • DesolatELifE
    July 5

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    Very nice indeed, of course.

    This contest.. I remember once you commented on a poem of mine. Twas 13 syllables per line, and you said it was feminine rhyme. If I could remember which poem that was, I'd know exactly what to write!


  • Denerica
    July 5
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    Powerful...can't seem to win...wow. well written again of course. Blessings.


  • pranj
    July 5

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    Well, this will take time to seep, I feel theres more to this piece than my mind can comprehend(at the moment at least) - but I applaud for the amazing rhyme, superb form and the meaning I have grasped in this first few reads! I plan to read it again when I am in a better mood - I hope I will give it some justice then!

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