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~Forever's Door

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Raindrops on my visor,

I can no longer see.

But I still hear her crying

on the wind in Tennessee.

 

Rain slinging from my tires,

the road, it seems so long.

I think I'll pull into this sad cafe',

maybe somebody's playin' our song.

 

I got cold feet at forever's door,

could've stayed with her forever more;

and I really loved how she would sing,

I just lost it when I bought that ring.

 

I know I shouldn't believe all I am told,

I should be at her side growing old.

We should be walking beside the sea,

I just don't know what's gotten into me.

(I don't know what's gotten into me.)

 

I left a tip and I hit the door,

stepping outside I hear the ocean's roar.

The rain has stopped, I race the moon on the shore.

I hear her cry, I going home for more.

 

I got cold feet at forever's door,

could've stayed with her forever more;

and I really loved how she would sing,

I just lost it when I bought that ring.

 

I know I shouldn't believe all I am told,

I should be at her side growing old.

We should be walking beside the sea,

I just don't know what's gotten into me.

(I don't know what's gotten into me.)

 


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Wait For Me by Bob Seger is the prompt

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  • This was a lovely poem,
    meloncoly and smoothly wirtten.
    You kept the structure of the poem very secure and stron with your words.
    It was an enjoyable peice, sad but nice


  • geckogirl silver member
    July 24
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    thank you

  • I thought this was very touching. It made my heart ache for 'her.' I liked the rhyme; it was gentle, easy, and not too distracting from the main point. Good work.

  • awww.... gosh this is stunning!

    I just adored it!

    well done on a faab write XD

  • OH MY WORD I LOVE LOVE LOVE THIS
    THIS IS INCREDIBLY GOOD

    BRAVO


  • emanon
    July 11
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    Wow. Just Wow.

  • piccola silver member
    July 9
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    needs to have music because I hear some ... nice job!

  • I really like this one too! Your very creative and the way you write the lyrics is just so familiar, just feels comfortable to read. The chorus is just pouring out regret, wouldn't change a thing!

  • What a fine song of missed, regretted opportunity, liked your repeats forth line is an inspiration. I think " Forevers Door" would have been my title, a delightful talented poem, thank you/

    • Thanks SS! I did change the title. I loved the suggestion!
      I just wrote something that I could hear Bob Seger singing and getting away with.
      Thanks for reading me!

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