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Night

I step through, into the new world,
Where I long for the world I left behind,
But found new things that I never experienced,
Opened my eyes to the world which once was blind.

I miss you,
The times we shared,
Everything that happened,
Memories trapped.

Grieving for the loss,
The emptiness and hole in my heart,
Where the old world used to be,
Refusing a new start.

Remember the times I laughed,
Remember the times I cried,
Remember it's out of my grasp,
And my wish is among the stars.

When I'm healed even partially,
Someone picks the scab,
But it's not ripe to remove,
And the bleeding starts again.

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  • Word poet
    October 15

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    This poem is very good it shows how much you are improving not only does it show that your getting alot better but it also shows that you are putting more feeling into your poems. You did agood job