Silver moons of hate
disappearing joys of life
the end brings you home
love makes the maggots
harder to brush off
your face is still as beautiful
as I remember
some say I am sick
but, I did say I'd
love you forever
A contest entry
- Embracing the Night by Night Terrors.
400 points, ended August 4, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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lol yucky but I love it very good thanks for entering I like the last line expesially
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WoW
"love makes the maggots
harder to brush off" Boy if that doesn't grab the reader!
Howard
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CHAOTIC
This made me feel an emotion of urgency. Maybe that is what you felt at the time...not sure. Love is always a sticky situation.
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Wickedly penned!
Best wishes in the contest and always!
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OooO. This is dark and disturbing...but beautiful at the same time! There is a lot of emotions behind it...and it really captures this endless love. "love makes maggots/harder to brush off.." That really stuck to me..it was gross, but passionate at the same time. I am not sure how I feel about this overall, it has me leaning in two directions! With "okay..that is kind of interesting but gross.." and beautiful but disturbing. haha. You have done a wonderful job here telling the story and illustrating the loving of forever. Wonderful. I love it. Kudos friend. You are very talented.
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